郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
 Posted: 2006-10-27 17:14:43 Post subject: 《女儿教我》 |
 |
|
一滴水与一滴水结合
不需要一个多大的地方
子宫真是个魔术师
能把二滴水变成一个人
那一声声爸爸
钻进我双耳
赶走我心血里野性
凝结成一座责任的山
见到我爸妈
女儿是我的老师
我向女儿学习
女儿把我当作她同伴 |
|
| Back to top |
|
 |
|
|
和平岛
举人
Joined: 25 May 2006
Posts: 1277
Location: Victoria, Canada
和平岛Collection |
| Posted: 2006-10-27 20:55:35 Post subject: |
|
|
真诚的诗作
看似浅白, 却感人
_________________
写诗是为了写更好的诗 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
杯中冲浪
进士出身
Joined: 29 Sep 2006
Posts: 2891
Location: 中国
杯中冲浪Collection |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
| Posted: 2006-10-28 03:54:25 Post subject: 谢和版主鼓励！ |
|
|
| 谢北版主直言！ |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
| Posted: 2006-10-30 00:11:07 Post subject: |
|
|
| 一是女儿教我“爱”，二是女儿教我“责任”，三是女儿教我“尊重”。 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
维鹿延
秀才
Joined: 30 Sep 2006
Posts: 212
Location: 中国广东
维鹿延Collection |
| Posted: 2006-10-30 03:14:53 Post subject: |
|
|
第一段写人的诞生，第二段是写由此带来的社会性，第三段是反思人类承上启下的精神觉悟和对人性可能缺失的补偿心智。
我是这么初步感觉的。
_________________
散步者身体里面的声音 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
| Posted: 2006-10-31 02:53:09 Post subject: |
|
|
| 被维版主读深了！谢！ |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection |
| Posted: 2006-11-01 03:27:32 Post subject: |
|
|
| 血浓于水 |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
| Posted: 2006-11-02 03:19:22 Post subject: 月版主好！ |
|
|
| 谢鼓励！ |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
赵福治
探花
Joined: 30 May 2006
Posts: 3456
Location: 中国北京
赵福治Collection |
| Posted: 2006-11-02 23:43:10 Post subject: |
|
|
| 二滴水变成一个人. |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
郑士渊
童生
Joined: 14 Jun 2006
Posts: 49
郑士渊Collection |
| Posted: 2006-11-03 19:36:21 Post subject: |
|
|
| 谢赵兄！ |
|
| Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
FAQ
Search
Memberlist
Usergroups
Register
Profile
Log in to check your private messages
Sign in
Album
