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什么才是最好的生日礼物(几天没写,感觉成了口水诗了)

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半溪明月
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Posted: 2007-08-12 21:24:17 Post subject: 什么才是最好的生日礼物(几天没写,感觉成了口水诗了)

什么才是最好的生日礼物文/半溪明月母亲，有没有更好的生日礼物如果，我们都不能在身边清冷的筵席上，父亲是否会哭？母亲，感谢电话还能送去遥远的祝福送上微薄的孝心及子女们永远的疚愧电话里，你我又提起那双鞋子提起过去的苦难，泪光中仿佛看到您年轻的身影母亲，您举着扫帚满院追赶我像小鸡躲在祖母的大翼下那双被我不小心剪坏的鞋子是您为我精心准备的生日礼物心痛的扫帚落在您的身上却痛在我夜夜的梦中多少次了，梦里我不停地搜寻翻箱倒柜，清点童年的花衣裳那双快要完工的黄割绒布鞋闪亮，压在箱底。当我手捧它时天，突然就亮了…… 母亲，如今我可以买许多新鞋却为何寻它独在童年的梦中母亲啊，什么才是最好的生日礼物您的梦中又会寻找什么？ 2007-8-13 后记：母亲六十大寿，我们子女却都不能陪在身边，只能电话告慰聊表心意。我想：对母亲而言，什么生日礼物都比不上见到亲人团聚的幸福。 “其实，不想你是假的” 文/半溪明月我们安静告别一周时间的出差 “老婆，我会想你的” 这样说的时候，你表情一点也不深情出发前，孩子送给弟弟车子放置在荫凉一角钞票放在茶几上牛奶水果放入冰箱你默默打点一切就差把我也装入行李 “别睡太晚，小心迟到” 突然惭愧。离开你我似乎丧失生活能力被娇宠成只会做梦的小猪不被需要的我日渐忘了自己的责任 “老公，不想你是假的等你回来，我要夺权了车子，你继续开早饭，我来做孩子，我们一起来管现在，让我们静静抱一会吧” 2007-8-13

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Posted: 2007-08-13 01:22:06 Post subject:

第二首的深情很动人；）。。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-08-13 02:50:12 Post subject:

kokho wrote:

第二首的深情很动人；）

。。

呵呵，第一首也很深情~问好KOKHO,你多批~ Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-08-13 03:10:42 Post subject:

都很感人 _________________ 靠才华为自己带来幸福的是才子;靠才华为自己带来痛苦的是诗人!!http://blog.sina.com.cn/hanshaojun345

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Posted: 2007-08-13 03:30:39 Post subject:

韩少君 wrote:

都很感人

问好少君~等批呢

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Posted: 2007-08-13 07:40:50 Post subject:

现在灌水帖太多烦恼呀 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2007-08-13 08:11:54 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

现在灌水帖太多
烦恼呀

呵呵，这些人在干什么？ Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-08-13 08:17:21 Post subject:

为了联赛投票呀... _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

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Posted: 2007-08-13 08:34:07 Post subject:

呵呵，我这里用不着投票啊，可以查ＩＰ地址的～

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Posted: 2007-08-13 15:36:28 Post subject:

最近人们似乎特高兴, 回帖怎么尽笑脸娃娃

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Posted: 2007-08-13 15:52:47 Post subject:

很感人的诗！！和平岛先生是让你去联赛中投票。问好明月诗人！！！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

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Posted: 2007-08-13 17:04:59 Post subject:

亲情无价！相比之下更喜欢第二首。个人愚见，也许第一首诗里你要表达的太多，因此反而不及第二首了。如果再裁剪再斟酌一下，可能会更好。问好明月！

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Posted: 2007-08-13 21:22:00 Post subject:

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最近人们似乎特高兴, 回帖怎么尽笑脸娃娃 Wink

呵呵，大家也许在过节?呵呵，我给给阳光就能灿烂的人! Very Happy

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