叶英儿
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Joined: 03 Jun 2006
Posts: 577
Location: 中国
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 Posted: 2007-08-07 18:21:43 Post subject: 如梦令 |
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美貌昭君被妒,
出塞曲折如雾.
红袖送香人,
却载史书深处.
留步,
留步,
社稷依然如固.
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白水
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Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2007-08-07 19:06:10 Post subject: |
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红袖送香人,
却载史书深处. |
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莹雪
进士出身
Joined: 28 Sep 2006
Posts: 2520
Location: 中国－辽宁·三燕故都
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| Posted: 2007-08-07 19:09:18 Post subject: |
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意很好，若在用词上凝练些会更好。不错，加油  |
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wenshan
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Joined: 29 Jul 2007
Posts: 112
Location: Canada
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| Posted: 2007-08-08 04:02:33 Post subject: Re: 如梦令 |
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| 叶英儿 wrote: |
美貌昭君被妒,
出塞曲折如雾.
红袖送香人,
却载史书深处.
留步,
留步,
社稷依然如固.
（浙江、叶英儿） |
次韵叶英儿《如梦令》
桃面莺猜蝶妒
塞曲黄沙嶂雾
马上抱琵琶
青冢千秋吟处
同步
同步
震旦叶繁根固
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白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
白水Collection |
| Posted: 2007-08-08 05:14:16 Post subject: Re: 如梦令 |
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| wenshan wrote: |
| 叶英儿 wrote: |
美貌昭君被妒,
出塞曲折如雾.
红袖送香人,
却载史书深处.
留步,
留步,
社稷依然如固.
（浙江、叶英儿） |
次韵叶英儿《如梦令》
桃面莺猜蝶妒
塞曲黄沙嶂雾
马上抱琵琶
青冢千秋吟处
同步
同步
震旦叶繁根固 |
闻山君好和, 问好. |
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