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如梦令《古渡》

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晓松
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Posted: 2007-08-02 19:16:45 Post subject:

和白水的和诗:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

病卧南厢息处
寒热腾云颠雾
慢咽痛失声
只为吟诗修浦
晕步晕步
点墨鱼猫相诉

白水 Moonlight wrote:

回首离别旧处
泪眼难遮咸雾
莹雪舞双蝶
古韵又添新谱?
停步,停步
且莫伤情再诉

小坐屏前望处
似雨似风似雾
咽唱几多回
冷月诗魂难谱
听步,听步
如泣如歌如诉

海南丢
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Posted: 2007-08-03 06:19:24 Post subject:

和晓松先生的和白水姐姐的和词，嘻嘻`` 小酒恰眸晕处，若幻若烟若雾。舌板卷长声，平仄巧谋词谱。摇步，摇步，拟语拟申拟诉。

晓松
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Posted: 2007-08-03 17:22:57 Post subject:

海南丢 wrote:

和晓松先生的和白水姐姐的和词，嘻嘻``

小酒恰眸晕处，若幻若烟若雾。
舌板卷长声，平仄巧谋词谱。
摇步，摇步，拟语拟申拟诉。

来而不往非礼也。呵呵~

小酒恰逢好处，绝少喷云吐雾。
无事也推枰，不用揣摩棋谱。
悠步，悠步，其乐逍遥慢诉。

周末有佳去处，灯幻舞池霓雾。
本拟婉相约，又恐心中没谱。
徨步，徨步，欲语还休简诉。

海南丢
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Posted: 2007-08-03 18:02:12 Post subject:

无酒举魂摇处，无菜烹涎煮雾。楸弈可分神，常是对家携谱。桑步，伦步，恰恰舞腰绵诉。

晓松
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Posted: 2007-08-03 18:22:03 Post subject:

有酒何须别处，有菜鱼香喷雾。再放几棵葱，都是农家菜谱。留步，留步，定要先干后诉。

莹雪
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Posted: 2007-08-03 18:54:00 Post subject:

哦，原来是JJ？ JJ也不偷偷的告知我，让我乱叫。

晓松
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Posted: 2007-08-03 20:23:45 Post subject:

半晌松林荫处，细赏天边绮雾。疑是有盟约，暗忖不该离谱。踱步，踱步，静候佳人来诉。人呢？

白水
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Posted: 2007-08-03 20:33:13 Post subject:

各位真好才情, 学习了

梅影三叠
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Posted: 2007-08-04 00:05:19 Post subject:

来读，有味道：）

海南丢
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Posted: 2007-08-04 02:03:38 Post subject:

晓松先生，最近我正在为谋一张马车上岗证奔波，不好意思哈，让你久等了学一首，嘻嘻`` 抿嘴酒壶拴处，闲却搬舌挑雾。前有脚丫伸，入眼洛河图谱。踉步，踉步，拥抱电杆狂诉。

莹雪
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Posted: 2007-08-04 17:21:01 Post subject:

如梦令－荷塘月色夤夜荷塘深处，冷照清辉如雾。芳透韵留风，似咽蛩歌南浦，停步，停步，雅意幽言可诉。

海南丢
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Posted: 2007-08-05 01:28:35 Post subject:

起势虚灵顶处，云手撇身锤雾。背折靠单鞭，玉女穿梭网浦。拗步，拗步，拳谱简之一诉。

驾言出游
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Posted: 2007-08-05 01:37:58 Post subject:

楼上诸君须留心，在下欲做宋之问 _________________ 欲把西湖比西子，从来佳茗似佳人

戴玨
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Posted: 2007-08-05 05:23:16 Post subject:

海南丢 wrote:

变体四：

依前闻所未闻，滨城热浪销魂。
风雨又何苦，不游尺寸阴云。
人人，人人，懒卧白水争瘟。

湊個熱鬧，和首平聲韻的：

鳴鷗疏落再聞，南風日暖招魂。
丟卻醉残夢，懶看海島閑雲。
幽人，幽人，待起軟草床瘟。
Very Happy

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duzhi
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Posted: 2007-08-05 19:05:54 Post subject:

翰墨痴情永铸，诗意如烟似雾。写罢放声吟，直入白云深处。倾诉、倾诉，引出梧桐雨露。 _________________ 清狂傲世随天性,仗义疏财任我行。博客:http://blog.sina.com.cn/duzhizhang440

白水
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Posted: 2007-08-06 08:11:12 Post subject:

哈, 抛砖引出这许多美玉来. 看来才子佳人真不少. 问好朋友们

白水
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Posted: 2007-08-06 08:12:43 Post subject:

驾言出游 wrote:

楼上诸君须留心，在下欲做宋之问 guns in hand

做吧, 恭候. 问好 Very Happy

海南丢
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Posted: 2007-08-06 15:02:06 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

哈, 抛砖引出这许多美玉来. 看来才子佳人真不少. 问好朋友们

所以，人人，人人，懒卧白水争瘟。 Laughing

叶英儿
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Posted: 2007-08-06 17:38:11 Post subject: 学习了。问好各位诗友。

学习了。问好各位诗友。

驾言出游
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Posted: 2007-08-06 17:40:16 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

驾言出游 wrote:

楼上诸君须留心，在下欲做宋之问 guns in hand

做吧, 恭候. 问好 Very Happy

啊，各位都天南地北的，做起来还真麻烦 Cool

还是做自己吧。在下不才，学步一首，期搏诸君一笑 Laughing

学艺邯郸千处，末了一头云雾。
还念故乡亲，无奈远隔津浦。
学步？学步！匍至寿陵谁诉？
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