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倾斜的天空（外二）

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Posted: 2007-08-02 05:47:19 Post subject: 倾斜的天空（外二）

倾斜的天空文/半溪明月当时间晃动着致命武器你又一次默许了我的无眠月光下，向花园倾泻大水然后，看它一点点漫过纸张十多年了，我们熟悉彼此习惯侧身就能闻到呼吸习惯一个影子跟从另一个影子习惯了眼中偶尔蹦出星隼多数时候，你以沉默应对我面南朝墙，像一株植物把根扎在诗歌的泥土一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上 2007-8-2 丢失十四行文/半溪明月我总是丢三落四不过这次错不在我就像小时侯奶奶说我不醒事竟让比自己年幼的小女孩骗走手中心爱的小刀那些都无关紧要这么大的人了牵去水边看风景重重滑倒在青苔石上我的小尾巴跌碎了疼痛昏迷中你沉入水中不见踪影我不会游泳 2007-8-1 三只拟或一只鸟文/半溪明月傻瓜，当你这样叫时鸟，真的很傻傻傻地幸福幸福地想要舞蹈你说：为了报答将远离所有的鸟儿那只豢养肩头的鹦鹉是聒噪耳边的伙伴现在，你真的远离了远到耳朵失聪一只鸟另觅枝头一只鸟彻底疯掉第三只鸟，一直傻！傻！傻！ 2007-7-30

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Posted: 2007-08-02 20:04:35 Post subject:

看你的诗题，感觉是好，很好的题目；读你的诗是痛，很痛的情感。问好明月，祝好！

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Posted: 2007-08-02 20:07:25 Post subject:

多数时候，你以沉默应对我面南朝墙，像一株植物把根扎在诗歌的泥土一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上 _________________ 溪语的博客:家住鄂西

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Posted: 2007-08-03 03:25:07 Post subject:

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荷梦 wrote:

看你的诗题，感觉是好，很好的题目；读你的诗是痛，很痛的情感。
问好明月，祝好！

呵呵，问好荷梦，让你担心了，其实有些是自己找的，并没有那么严重~

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Posted: 2007-08-03 03:28:10 Post subject:

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溪语 wrote:

多数时候，你以沉默应对
我面南朝墙，像一株植物
把根扎在诗歌的泥土
一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上

问好溪语，谢关注~

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Posted: 2007-08-03 06:40:44 Post subject:

月亮可好?

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Posted: 2007-08-03 15:17:47 Post subject:

第三只鸟，一直傻！傻！傻！好诗！！问候半溪明月诗人！！！！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

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Posted: 2007-08-03 16:21:12 Post subject:

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月亮可好?

呵呵，还行，谢月光妹妹担心了～问好！ Smile

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Posted: 2007-08-03 16:24:31 Post subject:

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第三只鸟，一直
傻！傻！傻！

好诗！！问候半溪明月诗人！！！！

呵呵，问好海军，向你学习～

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Posted: 2007-08-03 17:27:41 Post subject:

傻瓜，当你这样叫时鸟，真的很傻傻傻地幸福幸福地想要舞蹈谈恋爱的感觉！ _________________ 欲把西湖比西子，从来佳茗似佳人

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Posted: 2007-08-04 23:02:21 Post subject:

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半溪明月 wrote:

荷梦 wrote:

看你的诗题，感觉是好，很好的题目；读你的诗是痛，很痛的情感。
问好明月，祝好！

呵呵，问好荷梦，让你担心了，其实有些是自己找的，并没有那么严重~

这样就好!

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Posted: 2007-08-05 00:24:14 Post subject:

明月，对谁都照出　一个影子　：））所以　好诗，不用　你，我，他。。。才能更好地对读者产生　代入感　。 _________________ 乒乓、摄影、诗歌

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Posted: 2007-08-05 00:24:15 Post subject:

把根扎在诗歌的泥土一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上 ——艳而灿烂！ _________________ 诗是人生的雅伴儿。

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Posted: 2007-08-05 00:34:49 Post subject:

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明月，对谁都照出　一个影子　：））

所以　好诗，不用　你，我，他。。。

才能更好地对读者产生　代入感　 Cool

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Cool

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呵呵，尽量吧，我现在写的多是自己的情感，还没学会冷静的写东西～
谢谢ＫＯＫＨＯ指教～ Very Happy

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把根扎在诗歌的泥土
一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上

——艳而灿烂！

问好山城子老师，看见你真容了哈～ Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-08-05 00:51:28 Post subject:

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山城子 wrote:

把根扎在诗歌的泥土
一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上

——艳而灿烂！

问好山城子老师，看见你真容了哈～ Very Happy

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——只可惜我那个小狗汪汪它已经离开两年半了!

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山城子 wrote:

半溪明月 wrote:

山城子 wrote:

把根扎在诗歌的泥土
一朵鲜红映在灰白墙上

——艳而灿烂！

问好山城子老师，看见你真容了哈～ Very Happy

Very Happy

——只可惜我那个小狗汪汪它已经离开两年半了!

好可惜，默哀三分钟，呵呵，两年半了，应该早不伤心了哈 Razz

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Posted: 2007-08-05 19:24:25 Post subject:

提读，喜欢你的风格 `````````````` _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

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