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戈壁
黑雨滴
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PostPosted: 2007-06-16 19:34:50    Post subject: 戈壁 Reply with quote

2007-06-16 14:04:58

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戈壁上
荒凉的月光骑着马走过
雪青的马啊
是我唯一可穿的衣裳

我耐心地等待
一条河的瘦弱、干枯
它的源头里不再有残雪的黄昏
我亲自砍下它的头
等着它响起前无古人的笑声

我了解这戈壁
了解一切生物走在戈壁上的感觉
我用这个停顿的刹那
挽起宇宙永恒的未来
这个该死的未来还没有来过

我粉碎探险者的谎言
把枉然的真相交付给沉默的蜘蛛
它正在织一张网
献给沿着过去旅行的人们
喜欢穿靴子走路的人们



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这是戈壁
是亚当以前的伊甸
是末日以后的天堂和地狱
是天际最远那颗星辰的故乡
此刻
它快要五谷丰登
人丁兴旺


死于戈壁是可耻的
我要生存!
我要越超生存的生存
和超越死亡之上的死亡
我是美的创造者和被创造者

我的身体里也有一个戈壁
三昧真火日夜燃烧着
黑暗和光明仿佛要撕裂
将残的肢体
我吞下大量海水
我想这是火焰的源泉

一座山与另一座山
能有多远
如果我愿意
驮着月光走过的
其实是一个开满玫瑰的戈壁

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    桔子
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    PostPosted: 2007-06-16 21:50:01    Post subject: Reply with quote

    好美的戈壁,有种苍凉之美.
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    杨海军
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    PostPosted: 2007-06-17 01:09:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

    真不错!问候黑雨滴诗人!!
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    走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮
    ——拙作《离开村庄》
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    韩少君
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    PostPosted: 2007-06-17 15:05:44    Post subject: Reply with quote

    戈壁上
    荒凉的月光骑着马走过
    雪青的马啊
    是我唯一可穿的衣裳


    如果我愿意
    驮着月光走过的
    其实是一个开满玫瑰的戈壁

    颇有好句。欣赏。

    建议:诗可叙述,不可阐述。个见。
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    白水
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    PostPosted: 2007-06-17 15:19:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

    沧桑的美
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    黑雨滴
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    PostPosted: 2007-06-17 19:44:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

    特别感谢韩少君老师,您的意见非常好,我修改了一下

    感谢桔子感谢杨海军感谢白水的光临,问好各位
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