弹剑作歌
童生
Joined: 11 Mar 2007
Posts: 68
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 Posted: 2007-05-25 18:58:02 Post subject: 应答并寄曹先生 |
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夜夜偷听两地风，呜声虽异泪相同。
何须问道求因果，岂敢亏心诉隐衷。
情到痴时情转薄，恨无穷际恨成空。
今生枉有男儿慨，误却燕山一片红。 |
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白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2007-05-25 19:12:13 Post subject: |
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情到痴时情转薄，恨无穷际恨成空
好悟. |
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他乡客
秀才
Joined: 03 Jan 2007
Posts: 487
Location: 加拿大.渥汰华 (Ottawa, Canada)
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| Posted: 2007-05-26 05:56:14 Post subject: |
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今生枉有男儿慨，误却燕山一片红。
伟哉，弹剑作歌兄。大丈夫也。使俺想起好汉林冲的唱段：空怀血刃未除奸，叹英雄生死离别遭危难，，，
那天有空咱来和上一首。问好弹剑作歌兄。希望常来北美枫。 |
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暗香如沁
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Joined: 14 Jan 2007
Posts: 885
Location: 北京
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蒹葭苍苍
童生
Joined: 23 Jun 2006
Posts: 20
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| Posted: 2007-05-28 05:40:45 Post subject: |
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| 好诗，好诗 |
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野航
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Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 547
Location: toronto
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| Posted: 2007-05-28 16:27:28 Post subject: Re: 应答并寄曹先生 |
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夜夜偷听两地风，呜声虽异泪相同。
何须问道求因果，岂敢亏心诉隐衷。
情到痴时情转薄，恨无穷际恨成空。
今生枉有男儿慨，误却燕山一片红。 |
能做一句之中一波三折，体古而意不古，高手。
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回归自然 回归心灵 回归传统 |
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晓松
举人
Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192
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| Posted: 2007-05-28 20:26:26 Post subject: |
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弹剑兄多日不见，一向可好？
前有离骚入目，今有男儿慨，让人欲无动于衷而不能。 |
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戴玨
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Joined: 03 Jan 2007
Posts: 808
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| Posted: 2007-05-28 22:12:01 Post subject: |
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後半最好，頷聯稍弱。
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I labour by singing light
我的blog
我的專欄 |
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暗香如沁
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Joined: 14 Jan 2007
Posts: 885
Location: 北京
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晓松
举人
Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192
晓松Collection |
| Posted: 2007-05-29 20:59:03 Post subject: |
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想让弹剑出面不难，我写两句话，他见到肯定出现。
水深流去慢，君子姗来迟。 |
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