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原创一首《屈原》投稿，请阅！

纪才
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Posted: 2007-04-08 13:59:57 Post subject: 原创一首《屈原》投稿，请阅！

《屈原》纪才勤劳的拖拉机拽醒乡下的酣梦遍插艾蒿的门楣锁着三千年的风俗迷蒙的炊烟点燃宁静的早晨早起的妇人开始盘点幸福的日子胡同里走过三千年的相思镜头里摄入心灵的抖动抓住人生中的百年回眸苇叶将亲情和思念一起包裹汨罗江让你的生命纯洁无暇你行走在我的梦里传阅了三十几个世纪依然不老研究者成了名人学士你依旧布衣长衫汨罗江清澈如你白纸一样的人生 114202 辽宁海城南台一中张继才

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Posted: 2007-04-08 14:51:20 Post subject:

研究者成了名人学士你依旧布衣长衫五千年的风俗/三千年/二十几个世纪，有点糊涂。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

纪才
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Posted: 2007-04-09 06:04:28 Post subject:

问nobody好！《屈原》纪才勤劳的拖拉机拽醒乡下的酣梦遍插艾蒿的门楣锁着三千年的风俗迷蒙的炊烟点燃宁静的早晨早起的妇人开始盘点幸福的日子胡同里走过三千年的相思镜头里摄入心灵的抖动抓住人生中的百年回眸苇叶将亲情和思念一起包裹汨罗江让你的生命纯洁无暇你行走在我的梦里吃粽子时我会想起你想起你的清高与刚直橘树一样的品格你用血与泪铸就《离骚》传阅了三十几个世纪依然不老研究者成了名人学士你依旧布衣长衫汨罗江清澈如你白纸一样的人生

纪才
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Posted: 2007-05-01 19:25:52 Post subject:

请各位网友很评。

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Posted: 2007-05-02 09:33:44 Post subject:

这首诗，写得非常好．＂吃粽子时我会想起你想起你的清高与刚直橘树一样的品格你用血与泪铸就《离骚＞＂这几句去掉的话，我觉得会更好些，含蓄．因为屈原高洁形象我们已熟知，这里没有必要直露，会和上面的句子显得不调和．勤劳的拖拉机拽醒乡下的酣梦遍插艾蒿的门楣锁着三千年的风俗迷蒙的炊烟点燃宁静的早晨早起的妇人开始盘点幸福的日子胡同里走过三千年的相思镜头里摄入心灵的抖动抓住人生中的百年回眸苇叶将亲情和思念一起包裹汨罗江让你的生命纯洁无暇你行走在我的梦里传阅了三十几个世纪依然不老研究者成了名人学士你依旧布衣长衫汨罗江清澈如你白纸一样的人生再读读，你觉得如何呢？ _________________ 每个诗人都很重要

戴玨
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Posted: 2007-05-02 19:59:05 Post subject:

纪才 wrote:

问nobody好！
《屈原》
纪才

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遍插艾蒿的门楣锁着三千年的风俗
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胡同里走过三千年的相思
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你用血与泪铸就《离骚》
传阅了三十几个世纪
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nobody wrote:

五千年的风俗/三千年/二十几个世纪，有点糊涂。

確實有點，《離騷》約作於前305，304，距今約2300年。 Wink

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Posted: 2007-05-03 04:10:35 Post subject:

深沉凝重问好纪才 _________________ 北美华人文学社会员欢迎访问《诗友》论坛 http://www.shiyou2006.com

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Posted: 2007-05-03 06:20:48 Post subject:

汨罗江清澈如你白纸一样的人生

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Posted: 2007-05-03 06:30:44 Post subject:

遍插艾蒿的门楣锁着三千年的风俗问好!

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Posted: 2007-05-03 20:07:39 Post subject:

情深呢，排比一堆。问好，多来玩儿”） _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

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Posted: 2007-05-04 22:30:09 Post subject:

今昔联想，汨罗古韵，风采依然！ _________________ 生活起风的时候，我还站在风口浪尖，寻觅晶莹与美丽……

纪才
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Posted: 2007-05-16 04:15:41 Post subject:

问好伤城、戴珏、千山鸿、刘海澄、半溪明月、金金、离离北国草。真诚感谢伤城。

纪才
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Posted: 2007-05-20 01:03:28 Post subject:

按戴玨老师的意见重新修改了，请各位再阅。

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