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《清明有寄》（外一首）

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-04-17 11:22:12 Post subject: 《清明有寄》（外一首）

《清明有寄》（外一首）文/冷巉楼台遥遥，细草疯长花红柳绿，春雨洗亮山岚爱着的人已去鼎香瘦影，穿越经年孤寂几月几日谁与舍天堂钟声寥寥白二河上是谁的清泪？韩溪河下，洪荒如咽红尘锁眉，阴阳相隔夜色无声，佳期重临？回首始觉红颜老多少心字铭刻《远去的人》夜幕吞噬了清啸祈祷开始变暖飘渺的人啊爱的炬火不熄徘徊依旧尘封的谜面无人能解若时光能再与你三世清音相随 _________________ syr@shiyanren.com 冷巉湖北省十堰市茅箭区三堰邮政小区48号信箱 442000

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Posted: 2007-04-17 21:09:56 Post subject:

你受古韵的熏陶好深呀 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

赵福治
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Posted: 2007-04-17 23:02:36 Post subject:

红尘锁眉，阴阳相隔夜色无声，佳期重临？

杨海军
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Posted: 2007-04-17 23:45:23 Post subject:

意境深远。节奏内敛，音乐感十足，读来心旷神怡！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-04-28 17:47:54 Post subject:

感谢大家的回贴。冷巉在此向各位问好，祝大家五一长假玩的开心，乐的悦耳！ _________________ syr@shiyanren.com 冷巉湖北省十堰市茅箭区三堰邮政小区48号信箱 442000

金金
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Posted: 2007-04-29 20:34:03 Post subject:

古典的追求，深爱不止：） _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

金金
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Posted: 2007-04-29 21:52:23 Post subject:

喜欢你的名字 _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

远方有佳人
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Posted: 2007-05-01 00:23:41 Post subject:

你的诗有明显的词痕，满地的落花之美。

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-05-03 16:04:18 Post subject:

说点心里话来谢谢各位朋友我因为非常喜欢各类古诗，但又不想受古词韵律的束缚，更不想按格律诗来写，所以很多诗都写出了怪样而使现代诗人和评论家所不接受，但是我只为好玩。如果哪一天我认为不好玩了，就不写了。但我还是希望有老师和朋友给予指点，这是我非常需要的，谢谢。谢谢大家！ _________________ syr@shiyanren.com 冷巉湖北省十堰市茅箭区三堰邮政小区48号信箱 442000

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-05-03 16:06:01 Post subject:

金金 wrote:

喜欢你的名字

我好喜欢你啊，还有这些跟贴的朋友，我都一并喜欢了~~~~~~~`
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金金
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Posted: 2007-05-03 20:16:06 Post subject:

一并喜欢，花心啊你；； _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

离离北国草
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Posted: 2007-05-04 22:40:19 Post subject:

欣赏！ _________________ 生活起风的时候，我还站在风口浪尖，寻觅晶莹与美丽……

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-05-05 04:11:29 Post subject:

金金 wrote:

一并喜欢，花心啊你；；

嘿嘿，本人啊，不花但有心。
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Posted: 2007-05-05 07:14:37 Post subject:

拜读！君乃古韵微服赋新诗一竿斜阳星暮。几番青雨，网东方鱼肚莫道湿透（诗透）不好玩捣练也词吞吐摸鱼也词吞吐哈哈，且去呜呼！ _________________ （在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美）

冷巉
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Posted: 2007-05-08 06:45:20 Post subject:

先生真乃我师也。 _________________ syr@shiyanren.com 冷巉湖北省十堰市茅箭区三堰邮政小区48号信箱 442000

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