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黄洋界
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PostPosted: 2014-07-20 06:46:35    Post subject: 征续诗句 Reply with quote

我有一位朋友的朋友,托他帮查一首七绝的作者和三,四句,因
三,四句记不得了,我的朋友没查出来,缺失的三,四句也未续,朋友的朋友竟抱憾而终。现在请感兴趣的朋友将三四句续写出来,以遂朋友之愿,谢谢!原诗的前两句是:

中庭落叶舞逥风
冷雨秋燈一豆红
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黄洋界
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PostPosted: 2014-07-27 11:23:47    Post subject: Reply with quote

试续一:
展读陶诗今会意
东篱菊梦乐安穷

试续二:
无视苍颜明镜里
犹思荷戟纵青骢

在下抛砖,请朋友不吝赐玉 ,祝夏夜清安!
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黄洋界
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PostPosted: 2014-07-28 04:39:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

试续三:
忽得邻翁携酒至
开怀畅饮两相同
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PostPosted: 2014-07-29 08:32:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

好诗好续,赞
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黄洋界
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PostPosted: 2014-07-29 12:22:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢唐兄鼓励,续诗之举,权且当作一场文字游戏吧,
或延头两句句意顺意而下,或另辟蹊径,别出心裁
续成一绝,有新意则好。翘首以盼朋友续作。
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PostPosted: 2014-07-31 10:44:10    Post subject: Reply with quote

我怀疑这本是一首回文诗,黄兄以为有可能吗?
先试一下, 敬请黄兄指教,谢谢你
东径赏花妍满眼
蓬飞岸上岭悬虹

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PostPosted: 2014-07-31 17:17:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

Li 兄,慧眼识金,这确实是一首回文诗的架构,一,二句倒着读
很顺当。如果按回文诗的要求来续写,则又增加了难度。
兄续写的三,四句很美,且符合这首回文诗的要求。我想提出一点
看法:一二句“中庭落叶”和“冷雨秋燈”,为全诗已铺垫了场景和时间,那么,后边的四,五句,则宜顺势而下,不然,前后就缺乏内
在的自然的联系了,一孔之见,供参考。
请朋友们继续续写,可作一般的七绝续写,也可作回文七绝
来写。谢谢!
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PostPosted: 2014-08-02 05:15:13    Post subject: 謝謝 Reply with quote

謝 謝
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PostPosted: 2014-08-02 16:18:34    Post subject: Reply with quote

好诗好续,赞。
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PostPosted: 2014-08-02 16:32:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

中庭落叶舞逥风 冷雨秋燈一豆红
——很好的意境,不得不试续二三。权当狗尾续貂吧!

(一)
中庭落叶舞迴风,冷雨秋燈一豆红。
坐读南华吟自在,得来心兴似壶公。
(二)
中庭落叶舞迴风,冷雨秋燈一豆红。
窗下蛩虫声细细,莫非同会唱离鸿。
(三)
中庭落叶舞迴风,冷雨秋燈一豆红。
幸有鱼书怜白发,葭思犹在半酣中。
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PostPosted: 2014-08-02 16:34:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

多谢冰清赏阅和鼓励。续得好,简直是锦上添花!
近日可好?即颂夏安!
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PostPosted: 2014-08-03 17:07:51    Post subject: 学习 Reply with quote

且让弟一试

中庭落叶舞逥风
冷雨秋灯一豆红
翁醉已酣难和唱
融融共举任杯空

黄兄以为尚可否
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PostPosted: 2014-08-04 03:18:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

中庭落叶舞逥风
冷雨秋灯一豆红
伏枥壮心依旧在
今生无憾对苍穹
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PostPosted: 2014-08-04 04:28:41    Post subject: 再学习 Reply with quote

再加两句

中庭落叶舞逥风
冷雨秋灯一豆红
桐院静闻声隐隐
虫鸣小恼未聋翁
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PostPosted: 2014-08-04 05:36:49    Post subject: Reply with quote

Biiiy ,qinghong二位皆续得好。qinghong续句抒发了在冷雨
秋燈之夜犹壮心不已之情,Biiiy表达的即情即景,切合原诗开头
两句规定的时空。两次续句且可作回文倒读,与原句融为一体,
别有情趣。
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PostPosted: 2014-08-07 04:29:42    Post subject: Reply with quote

续句四:
中庭落叶舞逥风
冷雨秋燈一豆红
瞥见窗间新竹影
濡毫速写入诗筒
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