冷雨
秀才
Joined: 05 Nov 2010
Posts: 439
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 Posted: 2014-02-17 08:32:37 Post subject: 野老 【六绝】 |
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芦飞雁荡清河，桂落蝉鸣野歌。
草笠笛悠日暮，篱间酒醉吟鹅。 |
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黄洋界
探花
Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 3301
Location: 多伦多,加拿大
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| Posted: 2014-02-17 09:05:22 Post subject: |
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六绝虽小，容量却大，野趣盎然，俱呈笔下。
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喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰 |
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冷雨
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Joined: 05 Nov 2010
Posts: 439
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| Posted: 2014-02-17 10:34:15 Post subject: |
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| 问候黄老，新春快乐！ |
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冰清
同进士出身
Joined: 29 Mar 2007
Posts: 1921
冰清Collection |
| Posted: 2014-02-17 11:51:54 Post subject: |
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芦飞雁荡清河，桂落蝉鸣野歌。
草笠笛悠日暮，篱间酒醉咏鹅。 |
喜这抑扬顿挫之气！
问候老朋友！ |
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冷雨
秀才
Joined: 05 Nov 2010
Posts: 439
冷雨Collection |
| Posted: 2014-02-17 19:45:07 Post subject: |
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| 问好冰清老师！新年愉快！ |
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笑聊
探花
Joined: 05 Jan 2010
Posts: 3448
Location: 中国江苏无锡
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| Posted: 2014-02-22 16:44:31 Post subject: |
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| 容量大，显示作者文笔功夫。 |
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冷雨
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Joined: 05 Nov 2010
Posts: 439
冷雨Collection |
| Posted: 2014-02-27 22:28:08 Post subject: |
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| 问好兄长！ |
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晓松
举人
Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192
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| Posted: 2014-03-02 10:02:21 Post subject: |
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芦飞雁荡清河，桂落蝉鸣野歌。
草笠笛悠日暮，篱间酒醉咏鹅。 |
以小博大，凝练。 |
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冷雨
秀才
Joined: 05 Nov 2010
Posts: 439
冷雨Collection |
| Posted: 2014-03-20 01:53:49 Post subject: |
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| 问好各位老师！这首六绝平仄有错误之处，“咏“改为“吟“。 |
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