柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
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Posted: 2014-01-16 20:31:14 Post subject: 莲花绽放的日子 |
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黎明的霞光里
凝露的莲花含羞绽放
带着昨夜月色的温馨
沐浴在清新透明的晨风
黄昏的余晖里
舒展的莲花徐吐清香
载着今日太阳的热恋
漫游向缠绵曼妙的梦境…… _________________ 柳蓬 |
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山城子 榜眼
Joined: 23 May 2007 Posts: 4771 Location: 中国贵州 山城子Collection |
Posted: 2014-01-27 14:48:08 Post subject: |
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学习!! _________________ 诗是人生的雅伴儿。 |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
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Posted: 2014-01-28 21:32:36 Post subject: |
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多提意见! _________________ 柳蓬 |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-01-29 22:09:26 Post subject: |
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题目匠心,意境优美,个别词欠妥! |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
柳蓬Collection |
Posted: 2014-01-30 16:40:19 Post subject: |
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请山人具体赐教! _________________ 柳蓬 |
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火骏 童生
Joined: 02 Mar 2013 Posts: 8
火骏Collection |
Posted: 2014-01-30 16:44:48 Post subject: |
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挺清新的 |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
柳蓬Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-02 16:02:25 Post subject: |
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谢火骏赏评!新年好! _________________ 柳蓬 |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
柳蓬Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-02 16:02:52 Post subject: |
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谢火骏赏评!新年好! _________________ 柳蓬 |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-02 22:51:41 Post subject: |
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对不起,我用“欠妥”一词本身欠妥,请谅解!见仁见智,我的见解也许是错误的,仅为交流探讨,直抒己见而已。“霞光”“余晖”二词的寓意,是否可讲给我听听? |
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一无 秀才
Joined: 20 Mar 2013 Posts: 576 Location: 中国 一无Collection |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
柳蓬Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-07 18:23:46 Post subject: |
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“山人”客气了!“霞光”和“余晖”仅是清晨和傍晚的景象而已,没特殊的寓意。 _________________ 柳蓬 |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
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Posted: 2014-02-07 18:24:56 Post subject: |
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多谢“一无”赏阅! _________________ 柳蓬 |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-07 21:01:24 Post subject: |
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l我感觉莲花、霞光、余晖,都应该是有寓意的,否则…… |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-07 21:01:42 Post subject: |
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l我感觉莲花、霞光、余晖,都应该是有寓意的,否则…… |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-07 21:03:10 Post subject: |
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l我感觉莲花、霞光、余晖,都应该是有寓意的,否则…… |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
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Posted: 2014-02-08 19:25:09 Post subject: |
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是首情诗呢,寓意自我感悟 _________________ 柳蓬 |
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宝塔山人 秀才
Joined: 15 Mar 2013 Posts: 211 Location: 中国 宝塔山人Collection |
Posted: 2014-02-09 18:46:22 Post subject: |
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诗外有诗,方是好诗;词外有词,方是好词。古人意有所寓,发之于诗词,非徒吟赏风月以自蔽惑也。 |
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柳蓬 童生
Joined: 16 Jan 2014 Posts: 43
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Posted: 2014-02-11 18:38:00 Post subject: |
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领教“山人”了 _________________ 柳蓬 |
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