Maple Review :: View topic

	Chinese Literature Society of North America \| Maple Review \| Immigrants in Canada \| Angel Studio \| The Driftwood Artist Society \| Ocean of Poetry \| Island of Music "HuaHe Cup" 2007 Chinese Mainland and Oversea Poetry Competition and Non-governmental Magazines and Newspapers Joint Exhibition starts on the first day of 2007.
	FAQ Search Memberlist Usergroups Register Profile Log in to check your private messages Sign in Blogs Weblogs News Album



Dictionary Check Poems' Rules & Forms Search for Chinese Poems Poetry & Music

Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌

独裁者

姚阳辉
秀才

Joined: 04 Apr 2013
Posts: 139
Location: 中国陕西
姚阳辉Collection

Posted: 2013-06-08 11:00:54 Post subject: 独裁者

你捧起雪花春天立马来临你走进春天小草吐出粉嫩的新芽你抚摸小草大山披上绿妆你深入大山桃花泛出羞涩的潮红你折下一枝桃花觅食的梅花鹿受到惊吓你探访鹿的足迹鹿跑过的地方冒出一片森林你靠近密林百灵献出动听的歌你叫停百灵歌声随风漫过一片麦子你站在麦地边喊了一声遍地溢出成熟的果香你寻找果香的源头知了在树上说“知了” 你瞪一眼知了正午的阳光瞬间成为哑巴你索性站在原地不动俨然成为大地的中心你环顾四周偶尔发现呆头呆脑的我你向空中招了招手，我看到一个独裁者一手遮住了整个天空

William Zhou周道模
探花

Joined: 10 Jun 2007
Posts: 3950
Location: 中国四川广汉
William Zhou周道模Collection

Posted: 2013-06-08 15:18:36 Post subject:

结构上可以再递进。 _________________ 诗歌是灵魂的歌唱. 周道模

姚阳辉
秀才

Joined: 04 Apr 2013
Posts: 139
Location: 中国陕西
姚阳辉Collection

Posted: 2013-06-09 15:18:50 Post subject:

William Zhou周道模 wrote:

结构上可以再递进。

谢谢点评！问好！

Display posts from previous:

Emoticons





View more Emoticons

Page 1 of 1 View previous topic View next topic

Maple Review Home -> 现代诗歌

Once you post your works here, that means you submits them to the magazine of Maple Review (North American Maple, or BeiMeiFeng), a bilingual journal published by Chinese Literature Society of North America. The magazine holds the right to translate them into Chinese, and publish them in both languages. You need to be responsible for the copyright issues of your own files uploaded.
Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group
phpBB Chinese interface was translated by iCy-fLaME