影沉寒水 举人

Joined: 16 Feb 2010 Posts: 1145 Location: 中国福建 影沉寒水Collection |
Posted: 2013-05-10 19:05:37 Post subject: 七绝•春日登山远眺(新韵) |
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七绝•春日登山远眺(新韵)
谁见金蚨遮海内?难得霜鬓此逢春。
江湖旧梦衣冠远,阡陌东风杨柳新。 _________________ 诗无涯。思在线 |
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笑聊 探花
Joined: 05 Jan 2010 Posts: 3448 Location: 中国江苏无锡 笑聊Collection |
Posted: 2013-05-11 20:39:20 Post subject: |
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转结句衔接自然,欣赏! |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2013-05-11 21:26:56 Post subject: |
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阡陌东风杨柳新
好句。 |
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影沉寒水 举人

Joined: 16 Feb 2010 Posts: 1145 Location: 中国福建 影沉寒水Collection |
Posted: 2013-05-12 18:24:55 Post subject: |
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两位晚上好
谢谢阅读! _________________ 诗无涯。思在线 |
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