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夜作【六绝】

冷雨
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Posted: 2013-04-10 21:20:19 Post subject: 夜作【六绝】

平林夜幕星灿，静野清辉月孤。淡墨挥毫入韵，残灯伴影吟途。

桃园郎
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Posted: 2013-04-11 21:08:50 Post subject:

诗词作品，首要的是讲求押韵。朋友的六绝，意脉很沉。但押韵没一致。最后一个“苦”，仄声字，韵脚应该是平声的。 _________________ 诗词艺苑欢迎你！百度“诗词艺苑”即可找到网址。

笑聊
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Posted: 2013-04-12 10:16:09 Post subject:

平林夜幕星灿，静野清辉月孤。淡墨挥毫入韵，残灯伴影吟苦。意景不错，“苦”能否换成平声“途”？这是个见，还请自己拿主意哦。

冷雨
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Posted: 2013-04-13 07:19:01 Post subject:

问好二位兄长！谢谢指点！

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