勿妄言
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儿女相盟耄
泣别惊梦扰
长夜听雨消
泠泠靡相望
思与隔岸眺
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kokho
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慢慢欣赏。。。 今晚再来
 
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勿妄言
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慢慢欣赏。。。 今晚再来
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偶晚上先去自己"烧烤"了,馋虫逗上来了. 
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hepingdao
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很韵
每节第三句韵了，就会有点晕
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勿妄言
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很韵
每节第三句韵了，就会有点晕
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是"晕"吧!
谢指点,我在琢磨琢磨...
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