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PostPosted: 2012-10-01 10:41:05    Post subject: 祖国也有问题 Reply with quote

祖国也有问题

游戏诗歌 作

祖国也有问题
一个被采访的女士直言不讳
希望祖国一点点变好

祖国的问题很多比如强拆
比如官员腐败,比如上访解决问题
比如钓鱼岛还被日本政府在法理上窃占着

比如中国诗歌被边缘化着
比如中国哲学已经僵化
失去思想活力的民族面临危机

祖国的一些问题被有意或无意地掩盖着
还有些问题被淡化着,被忽视着
表面上如花似锦,内里腐烂不堪

我的祖国应该正视问题
解决问题
更加强大的祖国更加幸福的人民让我期待

2012-10-2
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PostPosted: 2012-10-01 13:01:36    Post subject: Reply with quote

最后一节,正面,但弱化了诗意
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PostPosted: 2012-10-01 16:27:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

hepingdao wrote:
最后一节,正面,但弱化了诗意


最后一节本是没有的
但有些论坛删除本诗,可能理解了诗的本意,故而明确写出来,让那些删除诗的人知道本诗是为了祖国更好!
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PostPosted: 2012-10-01 16:31:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

祖国也有问题


游戏诗歌 作


祖国也有问题
一个被采访的女士直言不讳
希望祖国一点点变好


祖国的问题很多比如强拆
比如官员腐败,比如上访解决问题
比如钓鱼岛还被日本政府在法理上窃占着


比如中国诗歌被边缘化着
比如中国哲学已经僵化
失去思想活力的民族面临危机


祖国的一些问题被有意或无意地掩盖着
还有些问题被淡化着,被忽视着
我的祖国不应该表面如花,内里腐烂


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PostPosted: 2012-10-02 00:11:52    Post subject: Reply with quote

同意和平島主的意見,最後一節可刪。
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