LB目睹过两次城管‘执法’

[hepingdao]

一个城管把卖小吃的饭碗高高举起
另一城管大声呵斥
夹杂着
唾沫星
碎瓷片,太阳的血滴,扎眼的反光
它们的中间
是小贩
流浪狗,人渣,扎进南京城墙的肉钉子

而我只是围观墙外的一位过路人
恰好看到这枚钉子
在原地
哆嗦着,慢慢的缩小,消失

直到今天,LB,我都不敢肯定六朝古都那厚厚的油脂皮层下
一根倒刺
隐隐疼痛,热血上涌,像把刀明晃晃的...拔不出来

[hepingdao]

What more interesting is: what is more important in poetry
forms or content.
送交者: steven 于 2012-05-03, 14:06:00




this is a very good question, this poem is a perfect example for this topic
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送交者: 和平岛 于 2012-05-03, 14:21:23:

回答: What more interesting is: what is more important in poetry 由 steven 于 2012-05-03, 14:06:00:

a content without a correct form is not a poem.
The material is provided by LB. I was shocked by what he saw. I decided to work on this piece of content. The process I took is based on my understanding of poetry:
form, using rhythm and imagery.

First step: figure out the things, nouns, persons that the poem needs to present, analyze the relationships among themselves;
second step: distort them, transform them into imagery of a poem. This will involve lots of imagination, from solid things to things in your imagination, things not real, but at the same time, are more than real;
finally, put them together, in a contrasted and concentrated way.

The end of this process is the creation of a poem, like it or not
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[冰清]

呵呵，真难得读到这样激情四溅的好诗。

[hepingdao]

感谢冰清老师的鼓励
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