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五绝又见白云（新韵）

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Posted: 2011-10-12 13:22:47 Post subject: 五绝又见白云（新韵）

五绝又见白云（新韵）枫灿白云还，高山绿水间。闲人松鹤曲，古韵谱新篇。

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Posted: 2011-10-12 14:29:21 Post subject:

和庆宏兄--又见白云欣然见老师，天意悯诚之。绿水青山久，枫红当可诗。

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Posted: 2011-10-12 15:36:33 Post subject:

笑聊 wrote:

和庆宏兄--又见白云
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谢谢笑聊兄和诗。白云老师康复归来，众诗友都很高兴和欣慰。

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Posted: 2011-10-12 18:45:35 Post subject:

謝謝庆宏、笑聊诗意！和上一首《囉嗊曲》：海内存知已，天涯若比鄰。深情歌一曲，酬謝友情珍。 _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2011-10-13 13:41:39 Post subject:

白云老师多保重！

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Posted: 2011-10-13 14:00:32 Post subject:

改一字：五绝又见白云枫灿白云还，高山绿水间。悠闲松鹤曲，古韵谱新篇。注：第一句写白云老师康复，第二句写诗友知音，第三句写白云老师诗词风格，第四句写北美枫古韵诗坛。请指正。

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Posted: 2011-10-13 18:59:59 Post subject:

行，神，情，都美！

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Posted: 2011-10-14 06:41:02 Post subject:

謝謝庆宏美诗美意！庆宏：与你研究一下，〝篇〞是〔一先〕，〝还、間〞是〔十五删〕，如是填词则属同部通韵，如赋诗就不同部了。 _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2011-10-14 09:44:06 Post subject:

冰清 wrote:

行，神，情，都美！

谢谢冰清老师鼓励。

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Posted: 2011-10-14 09:49:17 Post subject:

白云闲人 wrote:

謝謝庆宏美诗美意！
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谢谢白云老师指正！我查了一下韵部，对平水韵来说出了韵，对新韵来说，韵部较宽，所以符合新韵。白云老师病愈康复归来，诗友们都很高兴，以诗记之。

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Posted: 2011-10-14 12:17:20 Post subject:

庆宏说得对：在《诗韵新编》中，〝还，間、篇〞均属〔十四寒〕同部。謝謝！ _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2011-12-11 10:32:42 Post subject:

诗中岁月感云闲笛里关山绿水间问好白云兄! _________________ 一路雨丝一路风

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Posted: 2011-12-28 20:29:33 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

五绝又见白云（新韵）
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五绝又见白云（新韵）

枫灿白云还，高山绿水间。
闲人松鹤曲，古韵谱新篇。

很自然的嵌名诗，也祝白云兄及各位新年快乐！

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Posted: 2011-12-30 04:36:21 Post subject:

又读厚重的诗篇。祝福新年。也祝白云兄及各位新年快乐！

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