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PostPosted: 2011-10-21 17:52:07    Post subject: 溱湖 Reply with quote

溱湖
瓜果饱满的颜色从农艺园跟出,
在溱湖八鲜万人宴中品尝簖蟹。
曾经百舸竟争龙舟大会激动的场面,
三面塑像的药师佛用哪面观看。

走进水泊、芦苇、荷花的湿地深处,
河汊间往来出没一船船寻乐的游客。
酒足饭饱后的风景感觉要减肥,
没有山,湖也可以独自洒脱精神。
2011,9,24.
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PostPosted: 2011-10-24 10:18:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

潇洒的湖~
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PostPosted: 2011-10-24 15:41:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

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潇洒的湖~
谢谢你的评读,向你问好。
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PostPosted: 2011-10-27 16:07:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

诗与旅游携手,是一种境界。这样的人生,再无所求!回;诗歌论坛,读书论坛,新浪网, 车走直线 发表于:2011-10-22 19:12 .
谢谢你这回帖,读出我的一种心意。有知音之遇,不过人生有太多种活法,向你问好. 回;陈润民。


紧凑的有些拥挤。
但还是把美景美味表达的淋漓尽致。
看的我啊——馋了。(*^__^*) 嘻嘻…… 回;自由诗苑,越淇 发表于 2011-10-23 21:31 .
嘻嘻 嘻嘻 能让你馋了,我很开心,多谢了。 回;陈润民。

回;【星光熠熠新诗大观】唐晚词 发表于 2011-10-22 10:30
直言一下,情景写出来了,但特点没有写出啊。

文笔自然清新,诗意略显单薄了。欣赏,问好陈润民!
回;【诗歌报】论坛,诗歌大厅,飘雪姐姐发表于 2011-10-23 15:27

第一段自然风光写得好!
最后两句似是点睛之笔,但又想不出它的隐喻之意。尤其“减肥”二字,和整体诗意有些不相符。也许是我理解有限。个见。 回;诗歌论坛,读书论坛,新浪网,北国枫叶 发表于:2011-10-24 09:31 .
秋天树木落叶,相对春天是在“减肥”
现代人总体是富了,酒足饭饱后,开始寻求精神层面上的东西。
谢谢你这般的光注与直言,远握,远握。 回;陈润民。
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PostPosted: 2011-10-30 16:11:14    Post subject: Reply with quote

就是就是,好景色要好人看。我不生气了,气出来了。看看兄弟的诗歌,也像去了一样----那场景、那人群

、那笑声朗朗、那满嘴的河鲜美味,也挺过瘾的。
拜读了。问好。 回;自由诗苑,石下草石下草 发表于 2011-10-22 16:05 .
谢谢你这评读,能有这效果,我还得努力,下功夫多写。远握。 回;陈润民。
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