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七律-重阳遐想和冰清老师《望海潮》
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PostPosted: 2011-10-14 01:49:32    Post subject: 七律-重阳遐想和冰清老师《望海潮》 Reply with quote

[color=darkred][b]文/笑聊

开怀欣赏大溪川。满目风光收眼前。
枫火连天霞色染,菊黄遍地雾颜鲜。
深山几只雀莺叫,近海多群水母颠。
渐老金秋无限好,白云朵朵乐翩翩。[/b][/color]
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PostPosted: 2011-10-14 06:13:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

“渐老金秋无限好,白云朵朵又翩翩”,欣赏佳句!
建议将“又”换作“乐”以照应“金秋无限好”,如何?
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PostPosted: 2011-10-14 06:17:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

秋色連連.诗情翩翩!
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PostPosted: 2011-10-15 02:04:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

黄洋界 wrote:
“渐老金秋无限好,白云朵朵又翩翩”,欣赏佳句!
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黄老师的“乐”字,活了全诗。谢谢黄老师赐字。
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PostPosted: 2011-10-15 02:05:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

白云闲人 wrote:
秋色連連.诗情翩翩!


问好白云老师!谢谢点评鼓励!
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PostPosted: 2011-10-15 17:34:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

“满目风光”,笑聊君好和。谢谢。
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PostPosted: 2011-10-17 00:10:16    Post subject: Reply with quote

冰清 wrote:
“满目风光”,笑聊君好和。谢谢。


谢谢冰清老师鼓励!问好。
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