博弈 榜眼
Joined: 21 Dec 2006 Posts: 4381 Location: SFO 博弈Collection |
Posted: 2011-09-13 07:56:53 Post subject: pitch |
|
|
pitch
into fall
bamboo tubes
a stone road
woods ink
slants a leaf
dried 'n small
投句募集
入秋
竹筒
石道
林墨中
斜過
一片黃葉小 _________________ (在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美) |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
Lake 举人

Joined: 09 Jan 2007 Posts: 1286
LakeCollection |
Posted: 2011-09-13 17:04:54 Post subject: |
|
|
Ok, let's pitch in. I like "林墨中" and "一片黃葉小". _________________ the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
博弈 榜眼
Joined: 21 Dec 2006 Posts: 4381 Location: SFO 博弈Collection |
Posted: 2011-09-14 12:07:24 Post subject: |
|
|
6 lines,
a bit sound poetry
here and there
also,
ink --> in
leaf --> relief
中小,and 大?
 _________________ (在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美) |
|
Back to top |
|
 |
 |
 |
|