笑聊
探花
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 Posted: 2011-08-06 13:57:14 Post subject: 醉花阴-七夕有感（别体） |
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今日七夕，情侣相约；月上柳梢，黄昏堤岸；携手漫步，软语嬉笑；可惜天公，不肯作美；“梅花”来袭，风雨交加。故此赋词，以铭今日：醉花阴-七夕有感（别体）
文/笑聊 (新韵)
年年此夕儿郎盼，偏巧成思恋。本想乞诚灵，无奈天公，雨惹春宫怨。
梅花风暴侵城漫，树树摇头乱。岂顾下瓢泼，室内焚香，默许心头愿。
不知何故,重发了。 |
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冰清
同进士出身
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| Posted: 2011-08-06 18:54:25 Post subject: |
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| 笑版好词！意味隽永、悠长。 |
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qinghongh
榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007
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| Posted: 2011-08-07 03:25:48 Post subject: |
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| 古有王母作梗，今来天公捣乱。奈何？ |
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笑聊
探花
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| Posted: 2011-08-07 17:25:13 Post subject: |
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谢谢冰清老师赞誉鼓励!致夏安! |
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笑聊
探花
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| Posted: 2011-08-07 17:29:18 Post subject: |
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| qinghongh wrote: |
| 古有王母作梗，今来天公捣乱。奈何？ |
人生不如意事常八九.
谢谢庆宏兄来阅点评!夏安. |
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米运刚
秀才
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| Posted: 2011-08-09 07:04:29 Post subject: |
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| 知天命的是年纪，跨永恒的是情感。谢谢兄台！ |
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胡恢宗
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| Posted: 2011-08-10 02:05:05 Post subject: |
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七夕几乎因西方的情人节而湮灭，只有在诗人的笔下才有点痕迹。
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水曲云烟绕 林深鸟竞飞 |
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笑聊
探花
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| Posted: 2011-08-11 04:38:57 Post subject: |
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谢谢恢宗兄阅评！ |
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