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PostPosted: 2011-03-07 20:15:55    Post subject: 三月(组诗) Reply with quote

三月(组诗)

《睡美人》


她睡了
多久?没人知道
谁也叫不醒
不是不醒,而是她根本就不想让人们叫

太极只有黑白两道
就像两条鱼
睡梦中相濡以沫的,醒来
必定相忘于江湖

《雨》

轻轻的你
轻轻, 舒展一片叶
张开我的掌心,张开麻木的指尖
僵死的
神经末梢,轻轻

轻轻的我,轻轻地触
触摸封尘的键盘,轻轻
轻轻的,如你的柔。
轻轻地键入
几滴雨


《醒》

每个人
都在聆听,听一朵
花开的声音

今晨,
春风吹醒了那颗蓓蕾
不知你
是否听见?
隐隐约约的心碎
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PostPosted: 2011-03-07 21:27:26    Post subject: 不是不醒,而是她根本就不想让人们叫 Reply with quote

不是不醒,而是她根本就不想让人们叫

这就是:

隐隐约约的心碎

非常欣赏这组诗歌。


您为大家服务,诗歌也写得非常好。今天是国际三八妇女节。大陆已经先过了。鉴于您对诗歌的贡献和本人的诗歌造诣尤其是本组诗歌的特点,提议加精!
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PostPosted: 2011-03-08 06:29:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

末首很是含蓄,欣赏!
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PostPosted: 2011-03-08 16:42:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

韩少君 wrote:
不是不醒,而是她根本就不想让人们叫
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wow, 谢谢你的节日礼物。 同时也感谢我们老师,她最近组织我们关于LOVE的辩论,我就把同学中一些有趣的,或比较共性的观点随手记下来, 存了点写诗歌的灵感。没想到换了个大金牌。 Very Happy Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2011-03-08 16:43:46    Post subject: Reply with quote

胡沛伟 wrote:
末首很是含蓄,欣赏!


谢谢鼓励,问好。
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PostPosted: 2011-03-08 17:37:08    Post subject: Reply with quote

从收藏夹里许久登不上来了,还以为被禁了呢,原来换地址了,刚搜出来。
问声好!!!
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PostPosted: 2011-03-09 00:09:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

拜读、问好!
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PostPosted: 2011-03-09 16:19:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

骨笛 wrote:
从收藏夹里许久登不上来了,还以为被禁了呢,原来换地址了,刚搜出来。
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问好骨笛,还真想你们了。喜欢你的骨笛流韵
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PostPosted: 2011-03-09 16:21:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

唐慧 wrote:
拜读、问好!


问好慧
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PostPosted: 2011-03-09 23:40:50    Post subject: Reply with quote

真让人心碎这诗意,都写静景,我却想到首老歌——《滚滚红尘》,良多感叹。
《雨》《醒》,这两首局部连接稍显勉强,就是这个感觉。 blue moon
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PostPosted: 2011-03-10 07:41:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
三月(组诗)

《睡美人》

...
睡梦中相濡以沫的,醒来
必定相忘于江湖

睡夢本身就是個美人,人一醒就會把她給忘了。
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PostPosted: 2011-03-10 14:00:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

金金 wrote:
真让人心碎这诗意,都写静景,我却想到首老歌——《滚滚红尘》,良多感叹。《雨》《醒》,这两首局部连接稍显勉强,就是这个感觉。
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谢谢直言 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2011-03-10 14:06:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

戴玨 wrote:
白水 Moonlight wrote:
三月(组诗)

《睡美人》

...
睡梦中相濡以沫的,醒来
必定相忘于江湖

睡夢本身就是個美人,人一醒就會把她給忘了。


是。同学中有人说, 梦一样美的恋爱,婚姻往往易碎 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2011-03-13 07:39:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

3首短诗都写得很有感觉,简洁中富有美感,并且没有任何晦涩的表达。欣赏!!!
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PostPosted: 2011-03-13 14:37:07    Post subject: Reply with quote

花儿刚睡醒就听见你了祝福的声音。祝福。
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PostPosted: 2011-03-16 13:40:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好文星,海军
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PostPosted: 2011-03-17 03:42:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

好美的睡美人,喜欢。问好白白姊妹。我那网站改版了,这是地址http://www.wqly.net/forum.php
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PostPosted: 2011-03-17 14:38:29    Post subject: Reply with quote

红,好。
去看了,挺棒的。改天不忙了,去凑个热闹 Very Happy
纸条和e-mail已收到,辛苦了,非常感谢。
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PostPosted: 2011-03-17 14:59:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

凝练,意丰。学习。问候。
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PostPosted: 2011-03-17 21:49:18    Post subject: Reply with quote

轻轻地春风,把你的诗歌吹醒。顶了!
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