东北诗弦
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 Posted: 2010-11-01 06:04:33 Post subject: 无题 |
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我向湖心掷一枚石子，
眼波中激起一朵水花，
动作诠释了一团寂寞。
无意中惊走一伍白鸭。
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William Zhou周道模
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Joined: 10 Jun 2007
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| Posted: 2010-11-03 23:34:34 Post subject: |
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第二句有灵思。
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晴宝儿
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| Posted: 2010-11-04 18:31:41 Post subject: |
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因为东北两字进来..
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东北诗弦
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| Posted: 2010-11-04 22:31:48 Post subject: |
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希望多提批评意见。
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晴宝儿
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| Posted: 2010-11-09 17:39:26 Post subject: |
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你都诠释了，呵呵
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子在川上曰
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| Posted: 2010-11-09 18:40:46 Post subject: |
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喜欢第三句，那就本身就是一首诗。
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