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原创）七律-无题

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-17 03:25:10 Post subject: 原创）七律-无题

（原创）七律-无题文/笑聊晚秋金桂满枝香，云淡登高寂寞尝。无意远凝思绝赋，有心难渡盼佳章。风光正好红枫日，景色天然墨菊乡。直抒胸怀前史鉴，此番牵动几朝纲？

qinghongh
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Posted: 2010-10-17 04:40:42 Post subject:

直抒胸怀前史鉴，此番牵动几朝纲？尾联很有含意。但“直抒”为平，应用仄。微瑕。

戴玨
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Posted: 2010-10-17 04:46:35 Post subject:

尾聯突然間懷古，前面缺乏鋪墊。 _________________ I labour by singing light 我的blog 我的專欄

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-17 08:26:14 Post subject:

重阳登高抒神思,風光正好挥筆怡! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-17 16:07:35 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

直抒胸怀前史鉴，此番牵动几朝纲？
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谢庆宏兄雅评！问好。

直抒，平水韵仄声。今音，平声。谢谢庆宏兄探讨。

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-17 16:14:10 Post subject:

白云闲人 wrote:

重阳登高抒神思,風光正好挥筆怡!

问好白云兄！这首诗有点“为赋新诗强说愁”的味道。

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-17 16:18:02 Post subject:

戴玨 wrote:

尾聯突然間懷古，前面缺乏鋪墊。

谢谢戴玨老师关注点评！问秋安！

影沉寒水
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Posted: 2010-10-18 03:24:10 Post subject:

重阳登高之作 _________________ 诗无涯。思在线

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Posted: 2010-10-18 04:43:26 Post subject:

影沉寒水 wrote:

重阳登高之作

谢谢寒水兄赏读点评！

白水
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Posted: 2010-10-18 19:33:27 Post subject:

极目霜天，万千思绪

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-19 03:20:54 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

极目霜天，万千思绪

谢谢白水赏评！问好白水！

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