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落基秋遊 --- ( 一 )

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-05 12:14:31 Post subject:

. . 落基秋遊. . <调寄行香子> 笛涛箫風, 豪兴徜佯. 葱葱佳气兴悠长. 层林尽染, 烂缦秋妝. 正丹楓醉, 金叶舞, 菊花黄! 冰峰倒影, 天湖美景. 玉鑑琼田妙无双. 山光水色, 百鳥天堂. 有群莺唱, 隊雁往, 對鸥翔! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

影沉寒水
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Posted: 2010-10-06 03:05:58 Post subject:

秋游快乐 _________________ 诗无涯。思在线

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-06 03:47:45 Post subject: 行香子-丹霞日出

文/笑聊并和白云兄《行香子》戴月披星，观日之行。正秋风、瑟瑟无情。丹霞极目，为顾光明。盼骄阳出、群山显、彩霞凝。远山耸立，莲显花盈。恁神工、巧夺天成。初升红日，万国才醒。但云如海、峰如削、念如应。归类拦：只能归在-律诗绝句中，不知何故。 [/real]

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-06 07:42:15 Post subject:

謝影沉寒水! 秋妆七彩豐,乐在山水中! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-06 07:53:31 Post subject:

謝笑聊和詞! 笑聊,黄山之行还有什么精彩、有趣的見闻,共同分享! "归类栏:只能归在-律诗绝句中,不知何故." 這是什么意思?指的是什么归类?看不明白! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

qinghongh
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Posted: 2010-10-06 08:20:39 Post subject:

笑聊 wrote:

文/笑聊并和白云兄《行香子》

戴月披星，观日之行。正秋风、瑟瑟无情。丹霞极目，为顾光明。盼骄阳出、群山显、彩霞凝。

远山松立，莲显花盈。恁神工、巧夺天成。初升红日，万国才醒。但云如海、峰如削、念如应。

归类拦：只能归在-律诗绝句中，不知何故。
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拜读白云老师及笑聊兄唱和好词。与笑聊兄商榷：

“远山松立”是否“远山耸立”之键误？因为既然山远，就不易见松立。

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-06 11:28:39 Post subject:

謝謝庆宏賞讀! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-06 18:08:16 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

笑聊 wrote:

拜读白云老师及笑聊兄唱和好词。与笑聊兄商榷：
...

庆宏兄所言极是，已纠正。问好！

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-06 19:32:34 Post subject:

白云闲人 wrote:

謝笑聊和詞!
...

问好白云兄！去黄山旅游，此次时间局促，（总共三天）。第一天路上，到达黄山时已下午三点多。雨中游了翡翠池。上黄山游了在山上待了一天，其中排队花去约五小时之多。（节日人多）一是过一线天（鳌鱼洞）花了二小时多，再有下山乘缆车，也是二小时多。只玩了排云亭，丹霞峰，光明顶，鳌鱼峰，莲花峰，（天都峰封山）玉屏峰等。稍后整理即发出共享。

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-07 06:28:19 Post subject:

笑聊,实际只有一天在黄山游玩,一天時間太少了! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-10-08 04:52:46 Post subject:

是的白云兄，准备再去一次。下次去一定避开节假日。

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-10-08 07:20:31 Post subject:

笑聊,人一生,物一生,人生宜尽兴,万物皆自得! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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