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城市的火苗(外一首)

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Posted: 2007-03-24 22:42:22 Post subject: 城市的火苗(外一首)

城市的火苗那是地心之火蕴藏着能量在水中寻到突破的出口沿江一路地燃放五光十色烟花一样冷艳跳跃和蠕动同样让人心醉我们敲打着教堂钟声叮叮当当一路走来这是经过大水淬火的感情正如你我之间的火苗冷静地、冷静地燃烧 2007-3-25 行囊从三月出发我没装上那朵偷摘的桃花包里有为你新酿的花雕抖落一身风尘用四月西湖的雨洗尽铅华断桥上与你同醉一伞

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Posted: 2007-03-24 23:38:01 Post subject: Re: 城市的火苗(外一首)

抖落一身风尘用四月西湖的雨洗尽铅华断桥上与你同醉一伞[/quote] 问好明月，学习好诗。 _________________ 只有在寒冷的冬天，我们才能接近最纯净的光芒。

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Posted: 2007-03-25 01:15:14 Post subject: Re: 城市的火苗(外一首)

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徐业华 wrote:

抖落一身风尘
用四月西湖的雨
洗尽铅华
断桥上与你同醉一伞

问好明月，学习好诗。[/quote]

谢朋友阅读，请多批~问好 Smile

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Posted: 2007-03-25 16:49:33 Post subject:

支持，祝好！ _________________ 诗观:用犀利的语言穿越人们的身躯! http://blog.sina.com.cn/nanyanfish

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Posted: 2007-03-25 22:53:20 Post subject:

欣赏！！！！！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

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Posted: 2007-03-26 06:44:07 Post subject: Re: 城市的火苗(外一首)

[quote="半溪明月"]城市的火苗这是经过大水淬火的感情正如你我之间的火苗冷静地、冷静地燃烧 2007-3-25 千锤百炼的感情哦. _________________ 隔海抒情

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Posted: 2007-03-26 23:17:03 Post subject:

祝贺不断进步中。感谢去nowhere问候留言。哈哈，我自己很少回家的。你以前写的那首清明回家的诗不错啊，不知为什末自己做了修改，把“玄衣“ 什末的去掉了，觉得不如以前好。不知为什末。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-03-27 03:11:36 Post subject:

[quote="nobody"]祝贺不断进步中。感谢去nowhere问候留言。哈哈，我自己很少回家的。你以前写的那首清明回家的诗不错啊，不知为什末自己做了修改，把“玄衣“ 什末的去掉了，觉得不如以前好。不知为什末。[/quote 是我们这的一个老师帮我改的,他说不一定非得固定穿什么颜色的衣服,说是另两句与主题无关,,也删除了,就剩下硬邦邦的骨头,没有肉了哈.所以我把两收都放在了里面

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Posted: 2007-03-27 04:16:33 Post subject: Re: 城市的火苗(外一首)

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半溪明月 wrote:

城市的火苗

这是经过大水淬火的感情
正如你我之间的火苗
冷静地、冷静地燃烧
2007-3-25

千锤百炼的感情哦.

谢赏阅,问好雨萍诗友~ Smile

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Posted: 2007-03-27 04:19:37 Post subject:

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欣赏！！！！！

问好海军诗人~羡慕你文章和诗歌都写得好! Very Happy

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Posted: 2007-03-27 04:21:53 Post subject:

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支持，祝好！

谢南岩诗人赏阅~问好! Smile

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Posted: 2007-03-27 21:45:05 Post subject:

"所以我把两收都放在了里面" 我怎莫每找到改之前的呢？能重新在原贴发一下吗？谢谢。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

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Posted: 2007-03-28 03:05:15 Post subject:

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"所以我把两收都放在了里面"

我怎莫每找到改之前的呢？能重新在原贴发一下吗？谢谢。

我已经把原帖找到了~

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Posted: 2007-03-28 03:20:07 Post subject:

喜欢的诗歌，问好 _________________ 冷是另一种暖

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Posted: 2007-03-29 03:22:07 Post subject:

谢寒丁诗人,问好!

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Posted: 2007-03-29 03:30:53 Post subject:

感觉到明显的进步。问好。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

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Posted: 2007-03-29 03:44:10 Post subject:

谢谢大诗人夸奖!还需继续努力!握!后天我去杭州了，估计半月才回来~

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Posted: 2007-03-29 20:05:38 Post subject:

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谢谢大诗人夸奖!还需继续努力!握!后天我去杭州了，估计半月才回来~

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谢谢大诗人夸奖!还需继续努力!握!后天我去杭州了，估计半月才回来~

等......................................................早日归 Smile

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