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甘露歌-荷花
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PostPosted: 2010-08-08 19:15:34    Post subject: 甘露歌-荷花 Reply with quote

静看吐颜清水畔,悠然诗意蔓。歌醉流云不肯消,丝雨润新娇。
信步幽芳神韵秀,秋来体态瘦。南浦兰舟闲赋诗,箫管为谁辞。
风来影舞文笔运,婉转离尘隐。寒近且归酣梦魂,留取独纯真。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-08 21:37:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

好词,惜无谱,不然放歌一唱,不亦乐乎。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 08:26:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

荷花高洁,耀然笔下。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 12:05:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

芳神秀韵、悠然诗意!
問好莹雪!
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 17:45:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
好词,惜无谱,不然放歌一唱,不亦乐乎。
谢谢笑卿兄点评鼓励!问好
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 17:48:02    Post subject: Reply with quote

qinghongh wrote:
荷花高洁,耀然笔下。

谢谢qinghongGG点评!问好
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 17:50:48    Post subject: Reply with quote

白云闲人 wrote:
芳神秀韵、悠然诗意!
問好莹雪!
谢谢点评关注。
问好白云!
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 17:59:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

来读MM好诗 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 18:29:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

静看吐颜清水畔,悠然诗意蔓。歌醉流云不肯消,丝雨润新娇。
信步幽芳神韵秀,秋来体态瘦。南浦兰舟闲赋诗,箫管为谁辞。
风来影舞文笔运,婉转离尘隐。寒近且归酣梦魂,留取独纯真。

莹雪MM清词雅韵,读之余香留口欣然提笔:

咏荷

晚来霞净小池傍,俏丽芙蓉出水塘。
侧立风骚姿韵雅,斜眸不语也牵肠。
腰裙瘦细闲人笑,颜粉亮鲜闺秀藏。
箫管谁辞云后月?今宵少舞更疯狂。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-09 22:42:31    Post subject: Reply with quote

白水 Moonlight wrote:
来读MM好诗 Very Happy

JJ秋安!谢谢JJ关注! Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2010-08-10 00:38:55    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:

莹雪MM清词雅韵,读之余香留口欣然提笔:

咏荷

晚来霞净小池傍,俏丽芙蓉出水塘。
侧立风骚姿韵雅,斜眸不语也牵肠。
腰裙瘦细闲人笑,颜粉亮鲜闺秀藏。
箫管谁辞云后月?今宵少舞更疯狂。


雨丝润就碧池傍,留韵轻姿戏水塘。翠袖抒怀倾意雅,红装照影入诗行。
兰舟颦顾寻芳笑,玉笔轻抛觅句狂。荏苒华年歌醉月,明晨泼墨丽文藏。[/b]
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PostPosted: 2010-08-10 02:26:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

莹雪 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:

莹雪MM清词雅韵,读之余香留口欣然提笔:

咏荷

晚来霞净小池傍,俏丽芙蓉出水塘。
侧立风骚姿韵雅,斜眸不语也牵肠。
腰裙瘦细闲人笑,颜粉亮鲜闺秀藏。
箫管谁辞云后月?今宵少舞更疯狂。


雨丝润就碧池傍,留韵轻姿戏水塘。翠袖抒怀倾意雅,红装照影入诗行。
兰舟颦顾寻芳笑,玉笔轻抛觅句狂。荏苒华年歌醉月,明晨泼墨丽文藏。[/b]


叠前韵咏荷并和:

佳人俏立翠池傍,漫舞姿浴水塘。

皓腕轻推情谊雅,媚波含露曲回肠。

绿裙风动嫣然笑,红粉雾侵潇洒藏。

丝竹悠悠声映月,几家玉笔觅诗狂?
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PostPosted: 2010-08-10 04:24:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

等我找到感觉也加入唱和,上一天班很累,只能欣赏。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-11 16:17:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:

叠前韵咏荷并和:

佳人俏立翠池傍,漫舞芳姿浴水塘。

皓腕轻推情谊雅,媚波含露曲回肠。

绿裙风动嫣然笑,红粉雾侵潇洒藏。

丝竹悠悠声映月,几家玉笔觅诗狂?


“吟秋”回和:

东篱醉卧黄花俏,冷雨淋漓洒水塘。

暖阁修文书片语,寒窗弄律吐柔肠。

今晨厚叶摇枝越,昨夜残荷入梦藏。

泼墨挥毫抛句雅,笙箫笛管伴诗狂。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-11 18:03:19    Post subject: Reply with quote

莹雪 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:

叠前韵咏荷并和:

佳人俏立翠池傍,漫舞芳姿浴水塘。

皓腕轻推情谊雅,媚波含露曲回肠。

绿裙风动嫣然笑,红粉雾侵潇洒藏。

丝竹悠悠声映月,几家玉笔觅诗狂?


“吟秋”回和:
...

美诗欣赏,谢谢莹雪!咏荷叠韵答和:

气爽天高寻美卉,依依不悔老牛塘。
金风远道临诗雨,玉露清晨转曲肠。
锦鲤回游辞旧,蜻蜓略点梦新藏。
芳泽不晓谁顾,半是矜持半是狂。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-11 22:38:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
美诗欣赏,谢谢莹雪!咏荷叠韵答和:

气爽天高寻美卉,依依不悔老牛塘。
金风远道临诗雨,玉露清晨转曲肠。
锦鲤回游辞旧日,蜻蜓略点梦新藏。
芳泽不晓谁吻顾,半是矜持半是狂。



欣赏,谢谢笑卿兄!“初秋吟荷”答和:

爽意金风倾艳卉,悠然翠浪卧清塘。
凌晨数点幽窗雨,子夜萦回感柔肠。
南浦兰舟别旧痕,东篱翠管迎新藏。
余荷弄影流连顾,重菊凝神自在狂。
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PostPosted: 2010-08-11 22:55:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

莹雪 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:
美诗欣赏,谢谢莹雪!咏荷叠韵答和:

气爽天高寻美卉,依依不悔老牛塘。
金风远道临诗雨,玉露清晨转曲肠。
锦鲤回游辞旧日,蜻蜓略点梦新藏。
芳泽不晓谁吻顾,半是矜持半是狂。



欣赏,谢谢笑卿兄!“初秋吟荷”答和:
...

莹雪好诗,欣赏。下面几处商榷:

凌晨数点幽窗雨,子夜萦回感肠。
南浦兰舟别旧,东篱翠管新藏。颈联应是:仄仄平平平仄仄,平平仄仄仄平平。
感柔改“九曲”?此处必须仄声。
痕改“泪”?此处必须仄声。
迎改“挽”?此处必须仄声,否则孤仄形成三平尾。

次韵咏荷再和:

晓雨敲窗三二点,凌波碎步舞西塘。
玉环醉酒姿容美,飞燕娇柔百媚肠。
最是回眸难忘笑,依然皓腕袖中藏。
晶莹滚动轻声问:辛苦为谁作赋狂?
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