影沉寒水
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 Posted: 2010-06-28 05:15:08 Post subject: 七律•咏月步白居易《江楼夕望招客》韵 |
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七律•咏月步白居易《江楼夕望招客》韵
青山遥望影茫茫，月涌江塘愁复长。
灯火万家辉四野，风声一树悔中央。
冷香独苑桂花雨，玉女琼楼秋夜霜。
知否流星销古怨，轻纱云动水清凉。
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黄洋界
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| Posted: 2010-06-28 06:05:48 Post subject: |
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"冷香独苑桂花雨,玉女琼楼秋夜霜"
好联,欣赏!
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qinghongh
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| Posted: 2010-06-28 08:27:54 Post subject: |
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| 黄洋界 wrote: |
"冷香独苑桂花雨,玉女琼楼秋夜霜"
好联,欣赏! |
同感。与寒水兄商榷：
“玉女琼楼”是否“玉宇琼楼”之键误？ |
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笑聊
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| Posted: 2010-06-28 14:01:41 Post subject: |
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| 学习欣赏！ |
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影沉寒水
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| Posted: 2010-06-29 05:11:36 Post subject: |
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| qinghongh wrote: |
| 黄洋界 wrote: |
"冷香独苑桂花雨,玉女琼楼秋夜霜"
好联,欣赏! |
同感。与寒水兄商榷：
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这样加上前面的独苑
那么同义词就太多了
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qinghongh
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| Posted: 2010-06-29 08:39:11 Post subject: |
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| 影沉寒水 wrote: |
| qinghongh wrote: |
| 黄洋界 wrote: |
"冷香独苑桂花雨,玉女琼楼秋夜霜"
好联,欣赏! |
同感。与寒水兄商榷：
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这样加上前面的独苑
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原来如此。 |
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米运刚
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| Posted: 2010-06-30 16:02:43 Post subject: |
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| 寒水兄好诗！欣赏！ |
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