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沉醉桃花源

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-16 08:03:31 Post subject: 沉醉桃花源

. 沉醉桃花源 . 《後庭花破子》寧静阡陌行，但聞鷄犬鳴。牧童横笛弄，漁夫唱晚聲。享温馨，身心沉醉，桃花源景情! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-05-16 19:03:40 Post subject:

因手头没有《后庭花破子》谱，故临时用《卜算子》词牌来唱和。卜算子－内功需修炼和白云兄－沉醉桃花源向往淡恬情，亦喜桃源梦。自在逍遥洒脱身，终日诗文弄。梦＝夢　洒脱＝灑脫　远避市繁华，总是尘心动。无意应酬杂事多，还觉生存恐。远＝逺　华＝華　总＝總　尘＝塵　动＝動　无＝無　杂＝雑觉＝覺

影沉寒水
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Posted: 2010-05-17 03:03:56 Post subject:

桃花源景诗中现 _________________ 诗无涯。思在线

关山秋
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Posted: 2010-05-17 03:43:34 Post subject:

白云闲人 wrote:

依笑聊之描繪,遂临屏一首抒展:
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学习白云版好词，真田园景致，世外风情！
没有找到此曲谱，“陌”仄声，似有出。
结句平淡了，“桃园避世情”可否？

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-17 07:18:32 Post subject:

謝笑聊和詞! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-17 07:19:40 Post subject:

謝影沉寒水赏評! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-17 07:21:19 Post subject:

謝关山秋的点評与提議! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

关山秋
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Posted: 2010-05-17 17:38:17 Post subject:

后庭花破子　　《太平乐府》注：仙吕调、金元小令，与唐词《后庭花》、宋词《玉树后庭花》异。此小令有两体：一体单调三十二字，七句五平韵后庭花破子王　恽绿树远连洲 -----仄仄仄平平青山压树头 -----平平仄仄平落日高城望 -----仄仄平平仄烟霏翠满楼 -----平平仄仄平木兰舟 -----仄平平彼汾一曲 -----平平仄仄春风佳可游 -----平平平仄平又一体　单调三十三字，七句五平韵　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　后庭花破子赵孟頫清溪一叶舟 -----平平仄仄平芙蓉两岸秋 -----平平仄仄平采菱谁家女 -----仄仄平平仄歌声起暮鸥 -----平平仄仄平乱云愁 -----仄平平满头风雨 -----仄平平仄戴荷叶 -----仄平仄归去休 -----平仄平 • 　　此与王词同，惟结句多一衬字。据我对词令的肤浅了解，无论词或小令，凡是五字句、七字句，几乎都遵循律诗的句中平仄相间的原则，甚至比律诗更加严格，不许变通。

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-05-17 23:33:03 Post subject:

谢谢!

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-05-18 06:48:50 Post subject:

白云兄，《后庭花破子》与元曲小令〈后庭花〉是否一体？因不清楚，故特意查了元小令，发现《后庭花破子》与元曲小令〈后庭花〉字数、句数相同。格律稍有出入如：孤身万里游，中平中仄平（韵）寸心千古愁，中平中仄平（韵）霜落吴江冷，中去平平中（句）云高楚甸秋，平平中仄平（韵）认归舟，仄平平（韵）风帆无数，中平平去（句可叶）斜阳独倚楼。平平平（以入代平）仄平（韵）吕止庵-后庭花曲谱见唐圭璋〈元人小令格律-后庭花〉假如《后庭花破子》就是元人小令格律-后庭花的话，观白云兄所供曲谱，似乎松了些。观关山兄所供曲谱，似又太严了些。关山兄说：“凡是五字句、七字句，几乎都遵循律诗的句中平仄相间的原则，甚至比律诗更加严格，不许变通。”有一定道理，但也不完全如此。这个翻开词谱、曲谱就可明了。以上所言，仅就〈后庭花〉是否《后庭花破子》所引出的话题，纯属个见。如有不妥，敬请师友指正！问好白云兄、关山兄！

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-18 07:34:21 Post subject:

笑聊,元曲有《后庭花》属仙呂宫调; 詞有《后庭花破子》;一为曲一为詞,互别也! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-18 07:46:23 Post subject:

关山秋,詞是比齐言構句的诗体句法更自由的韵文体式.經過历代詞人的拓展,詞的抒情境域更日益扩宽,感情容量日渐扩大,这一文体適用更广泛之场合,更广的题詠对象.这个蜕变始予唐,至宋大成! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-05-18 20:48:37 Post subject:

[quote="白云闲人"]笑聊,元曲有《后庭花》属仙呂宫调; 詞有《后庭花破子》;一为曲一为詞,互别也![/quote] 查到了。该词谱在《钦定词谱》里。词谱同白云兄所列一般。想不到竟有如此宽的谱。谢谢白云兄释疑！

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-19 06:43:11 Post subject:

笑聊真有恆心! 你的诗詞今后必有大成! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2010-05-20 10:44:47 Post subject:

凑个趣：）【后庭花破子】芝兰幽室有芝兰咫尺迴洞天生来仙风骨清馨远火烟自婵娟花中轩冕不骄终也难后庭花破子　　《太平乐府》注：仙吕调。《唐书·礼乐志》：夷则羽，俗呼仙吕调。此金元小令，与唐词《后庭花》、宋词《玉树后庭花》异。所谓破子者，以其繁声入破也。　　后庭花破子　单调三十二字，七句五平韵　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　王　恽绿树远连洲韵青山压树头韵落日高城望句烟霏翠满楼韵木兰舟韵彼汾一曲句春风佳可游韵 ◎◎◎⊙○　⊙⊙◎●○　 ◎◎○⊙●　○○◎●○　 ●○○　 ◎○◎●　⊙○⊙●○

笑聊
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Posted: 2010-05-20 17:52:17 Post subject:

[quote="笑聊"]因手头没有《后庭花破子》谱，故临时用《卜算子》词牌来唱和。 ...[/quote] 还觉生存恐句，觉得“还”字不如用“常”字。

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Posted: 2010-05-20 19:55:55 Post subject:

此情此景难得。欣赏。问好！

白云闲人
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Posted: 2010-05-21 07:03:31 Post subject:

謝犀利和詞! 道尽芝蘭風骨,好詞! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2010-05-21 07:08:04 Post subject:

笑聊斟酌推敲精神可嘉! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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Posted: 2010-05-21 07:09:45 Post subject:

謝昕阳一片欣赏! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

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