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醉花阴-清明
笑聊
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PostPosted: 2010-04-07 06:11:56    Post subject: 醉花阴-清明 Reply with quote

临屏依韵试和醉花阴-清明

掠燕低飞裁柳细,蝶舞青山碧。
乍暖节清明,路上行人,踏尽春光地。
艳阳恩施和风意,祭扫悲凉起。
莫道纸钱飘,缕缕丝丝,尽在相思里。

临屏促写,错误难免,敬请师、长们指点!

附草斋风凉老师原玉:
醉花阴——清明 (注:上片第三句漏缺一字)

柳乍含烟风乍细,画舸凝春碧。
紫燕初归,野旷云舒,水谧山幽地。
蜂闲蝶懒春闺意,切切因风起。
醉里莫凭栏,几点相思, 更绕烟波里。
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白云闲人
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PostPosted: 2010-04-07 09:40:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

唱和俱皆!
笑聊兄,笔触细膩,情景双依!
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诗中岁月,
笛里关山.
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笑聊
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PostPosted: 2010-04-08 06:23:30    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢白云兄鼓励、雅评!问好!
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影沉寒水
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PostPosted: 2010-04-08 09:30:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

乍暖节清明,路上行人,踏尽春光地
莫道纸钱飘,缕缕丝丝,尽在相思里。

好结
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诗无涯。思在线
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qinghongh
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PostPosted: 2010-04-08 10:16:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

莫道纸钱飘,缕缕丝丝,尽在相思里。

情深。
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米运刚
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PostPosted: 2010-04-08 20:28:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

唱和俱美,欣赏!
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笑聊
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PostPosted: 2010-04-09 02:41:56    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="影沉寒水"]乍暖节清明,路上行人,踏尽春光地
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谢谢影沉寒水提读,点评!问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-04-09 02:43:45    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="qinghongh"]莫道纸钱飘,缕缕丝丝,尽在相思里。

情深。[/quote]

感谢庆宏兄提读、点评!问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-04-09 02:46:21    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="米运刚"]唱和俱美,欣赏![/quote]

谢谢米兄赏读、雅评!问好!
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