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大伯邑的河床

戴永良
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Posted: 2010-03-15 20:49:01 Post subject: 大伯邑的河床

大伯邑的河床像崩裂的皱纹昭示着模糊的记忆风化的贝壳像烤饼灌满了泥沙的脆弱堆垒成褪色的风景我感到情绪的冰凉和岁月的浮躁听不到一点渔网带给茅屋的陶醉从指尖延伸到神经也许再无人问一块腐朽的船板或者牧羊老人的自语是来自民谣的抒情还是来自黄昏的破碎河床在草木的娉婷中解读着自己对繁荣的反叛直到被蚕食直到记忆只剩下一滴眼泪 _________________ 真诚友爱善良

金金
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Posted: 2010-03-15 21:00:13 Post subject:

比喻用的很丰富，觉得可以再细一点儿问好！！！ _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

戴永良
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Posted: 2010-03-15 23:20:37 Post subject:

泰安的大哥谢谢济宁的小妹！ _________________ 真诚友爱善良

金金
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Posted: 2010-03-15 23:41:18 Post subject:

不是济宁的小妹，呵呵。是爷们儿呵呵白叫你喊了 _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

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Posted: 2010-03-16 00:29:21 Post subject:

呵呵~~真搞笑的~~ 也许再无人问一块腐朽的船板或者牧羊老人的自语是来自民谣的抒情还是来自黄昏的破碎纯朴敏锐的想象和感受~~ _________________ 如果不开始，会失去过程。 QQ：3972083 微信：qisebaihuayuan

戴永良
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Posted: 2010-03-16 05:15:23 Post subject:

那就谢谢金金和安小弟，这回总不会再错吧！ _________________ 真诚友爱善良

杯中冲浪
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Posted: 2010-03-16 06:17:43 Post subject:

风格大变，然而不错。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

金金
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Posted: 2010-03-16 20:48:31 Post subject:

再拥抱一下 _________________ http://blog.sina.com.cn/shirenjinjin

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Posted: 2010-03-17 06:39:33 Post subject:

最近眼有点聋，耳有点花，嘴唇有点哆嗦，四只不会说话。 _________________ 真诚友爱善良

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