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他没有春天受欢迎
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PostPosted: 2010-02-20 03:09:50    Post subject: 他没有春天受欢迎 Reply with quote

1 长不成大树的原因

他曾用童音唱过春天
更把渴盼种进乡村校园
天平倾斜,迎接他的
没有化雨的春风和辛勤的园丁

像村里其他同龄人一样
他荒芜在乡野的田埂
一辈子都无法长成大树
坐满九年学牢,他奔向城市
散落为流水线上的草芥


2 他没有春天受欢迎

如同所有漂泊的草芥
他也是春运民工潮的一分子

踩着接春的爆竹渣到家
立春那天,他没有春天受欢迎
连续几年空瘪的荷包
足以塞满爆竹般的训斥

18岁的他,填饱皮囊都很勉强
填饱未来,实在太遥远
他那瘦弱双肩扛起的青春
真的不及屋后的新草绿
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PostPosted: 2010-02-20 07:40:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

他用满书包的嬉戏,装回民办老师们
对“白条子”的抗议与清退前的不安
他用爸妈的汗水换回应试课堂的漠视


有故事?

问好荷梦
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荷梦
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PostPosted: 2010-02-20 20:18:15    Post subject: Reply with quote

问好白水!
是的,有故事,这是我出生的村庄里一批90后孩子的童年与少年经历:读小学时,村小学的民办教师工资无法兑现,一年六七百块钱,年终却只能得到村里打的白条子,要养家糊口的教师们上班时间都去自家的责任田种庄稼啦,哪有心思教学?再后来,老师的工资能按时发了,却传出要清退民办教师,老师们前途未卜,也不可能安心教学。清退民办教师之后,又是调整学校布局,生源不足三百人的完小被撤并,改为教学点,管理混乱,自然又是可怜了那些的孩子。到了初中,又因为应试评价只关注重点中学的录取率问题,一个班上六七十学生,大多数老师只关心班上前十名的学生,其他的孩子听之任之。所以那些孩子上学如坐牢,能混到初中毕业就算不错的啦!
好在现在情况有所好转,如今的中小学管理以及教学评价基本能兼顾更多的孩子了,但到底是可怜了那一代被耽误的孩子!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-20 20:39:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

有情节、有故事的诗,在意随象生,象随意荣的诗句中得以生动。题目还可以再凝缩一下(仅供参考)。问好荷梦!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-21 00:38:22    Post subject: Reply with quote

谢谢景慧指点!原题目读着的确拗口,改了!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-21 00:43:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

不错的诗,望多发来一些哦!

18岁的他,填饱皮囊都很勉强
填饱未来,实在太遥远
他那瘦弱双肩扛起的青春
真的不及屋后的新草绿
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荷梦
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PostPosted: 2010-02-22 02:04:28    Post subject: Reply with quote

zmj166 wrote:
不错的诗,望多发来一些哦!
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谢谢鼓励!
又作了些修改!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-22 06:23:20    Post subject: Reply with quote

同感。目前,我们这里的村级小学每校也只有几十人。并校工作一直在进行着。个别学校,老师和学生的数量差不多,人浮于事。很多村小空闲,或占或租或卖,现实如此。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-22 07:19:43    Post subject: Reply with quote

社会不公平~何时能公平??
总有一些人早早的成了填饱别人命运的稻草~
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PostPosted: 2010-02-22 08:01:11    Post subject: Reply with quote

荷梦也许因为教师的身份,对我国的应试教育的弊病比其他人有更多的感受~新春问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-23 05:40:39    Post subject: Reply with quote

删去“他用满书包的嬉戏装回村小民办老师
对“白条子”的抗议与面临清退的不安
他用爸妈的汗水换回初中应试课堂的漠视”
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PostPosted: 2010-02-23 05:43:04    Post subject: Reply with quote

韩少君 wrote:
同感。目前,我们这里的村级小学每校也只有几十人。并校工作一直在进行着。个别学校,老师和学生的数量差不多,人浮于事。很多村小空闲,或占或租或卖,现实如此。

少君,握手!
我们这里是教师严重不足。校舍空闲是由于当年普九的好大喜功所致,浪费了多少的财力啊!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-23 05:44:57    Post subject: Reply with quote

安红红 wrote:
社会不公平~何时能公平??
总有一些人早早的成了填饱别人命运的稻草~

更可怕的是成为填饱别人命运的稻草的主因是因为他没投好娘胎!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-23 05:46:37    Post subject: Reply with quote

半溪明月 wrote:
荷梦也许因为教师的身份,对我国的应试教育的弊病比其他人有更多的感受~新春问好!

这不仅仅是应试教育,还有很多其他的社会问题。
新春好,抱抱明月~~
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