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卜算子-祈祷
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PostPosted: 2010-02-06 04:06:54    Post subject: 卜算子-祈祷 Reply with quote

今天是腊月二十三,民间都有过小年的习俗。谨以此词给大家拜个早年并祈祷天下太平!
(原创)卜算子.祈祷

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团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。

炉内降香焚,叩问蒼生悦?心愿从今不受灾,天下同欢彻!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-06 15:57:23    Post subject: Reply with quote

"天下同欢彻". 菩提心!!! 笑聊兄好詞.
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 02:16:59    Post subject: Reply with quote

感谢白云兄雅誉!顺问好!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 03:31:24    Post subject: Reply with quote

结句扣题,与兄同愿.问新年好!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 04:00:33    Post subject: Reply with quote

卜算子
元高拭詞注:仙呂調。蘇軾詞,有〔缺月掛疏桐〕句,名《缺月掛疏桐》;秦湛詞,有〔極目煙中百尺樓〕句,名《百尺樓》;僧皎詞,有〔目斷楚天遙〕句,名《楚天遙》;無名氏詞,有〔蹙破眉峰碧〕句,名《眉峰碧》。

雙調四十四字,前後段各四句,兩仄韻

蘇軾
缺月掛疏桐。漏斷人初靜。時見幽人獨往來。縹緲孤鴻影。
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驚起卻回頭。有恨無人省。揀盡寒枝不肯棲。寂寞沙洲冷。
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此調以此詞為正體,若石詞之多押兩韻,徐、黃、張、杜四詞之添字,皆變體也。蘇詞別首,前段第二句〔長憶吳山好〕,長字平聲,譜內據之。其餘可平可仄,悉參下詞。

又一體 雙調四十四字,前後段各四句,三仄韻

石孝友
見也如何暮。別也如何遽。別也應難見也難。後會難憑據。
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去也如何去。住也如何住。住也應難去也難。此際難分付。
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此與蘇詞同,惟前後段兩起句各用韻異。

又一體 雙調四十五字,前段四句兩仄韻,後段四句三仄韻

徐俯
胸中千種愁。掛在斜陽樹。綠葉陰陰自得春。草滿鶯啼處。
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不見淩波步。空想如簧語。門外重重疊疊山。遮不斷、愁來路。
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此亦蘇詞體,惟後段起句用韻,結句添一字,作折腰句法異。《古杭雜紀》無名氏詞,前結〔把定纖纖手〕,後結〔瞞不得、橋頭柳〕,正與此同。

又一體 雙調四十五字,前後段各四句,兩仄韻

黃公度
薄宦各東西。往事隨風雨。先是驪歌不忍聞。又何況、春將暮。
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愁共落花多。人逐征鴻去。君向瀟湘我向秦。後會知何處。
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此亦蘇詞體,惟前段結句作六字折腰句法異。《古今詞話》無名氏詞,前結〔終不似、伊家好〕,後結〔滿目圍芳草〕,正與此同。按,黃童和此詞,前段結句〔奚止朝朝暮暮〕,句法又異。

又一體 雙調四十六字,前段四句兩仄韻,後段四句三仄韻

張先
夢短寒夜長。坐待清霜曉。臨鏡無人為整妝。但自學、孤鸞照。
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樓臺紅樹杪。風月依前好。江水東流郎在西。問尺素、何由到。
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此亦蘇詞體,惟前後段兩結句俱六字異。杜安世〔樽前一曲〕詞,正與此同。按,黃庭堅此調詞,前後段兩起句,〔要見不得見,要近不得近〕,〔禁止不得淚,忍管不得悶〕,見字、淚字俱仄聲,連用四〔不得〕字,皆以入替平之法,因謔詞不入。

又一體 雙調四十六字,前後段各四句,三仄韻

杜安世
深院花鋪地。淡淡陰天氣。水榭風亭朱明景。又別是、愁情味。
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有情奈無計。漫惹成憔悴。欲把羅巾暗傳寄。細認取。斑點淚。
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此與張詞同,惟前後段起句俱用韻異。按,《玉照新志》〔蹙破眉峰〕詞,正與此同,但此詞前後段第三句第七字仄聲,各家則用平聲也。

又一體 雙調四十六字,前後段各四句,兩仄韻

《花草粹編》無名氏
幽花帶露紅。濕柳拖煙翠。花柳分春各自芳。惟有人憔悴。
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寄與手中書。問肯歸來未。正是東風料峭寒。如何獨自教人睡。
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此詞見《花草粹編》,《本清湖三塔記》,亦蘇詞體,惟後段結句七字,添二襯字異。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 04:03:17    Post subject: Reply with quote

团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。

第三句第三字必须是平声,“吉”旧读入声,在此属于“以入代平”,故合律。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 04:18:32    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="黄洋界"]结句扣题,与兄同愿.问新年好![/quote]
问好黄老师!谢谢雅评!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 04:20:25    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="李盈枝"]团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。
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问前辈好!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 05:55:41    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
李盈枝 wrote:
团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。
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问前辈好!
问好!今日老朽生日,要回复许多帖子。只能偶尔过来。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 06:28:53    Post subject: Reply with quote

李盈枝 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:
李盈枝 wrote:
团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。
...

问前辈好!
问好!今日老朽生日,要回复许多帖子。只能偶尔过来。


李老师生日快乐!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 06:31:06    Post subject: Reply with quote

笑聊 wrote:
今天是腊月二十三,民间都有过小年的习俗。谨以此词给大家拜个早年并祈祷天下太平!
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深感笑聊兄博爱之心:苍生安康天下太平。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 06:31:35    Post subject: Reply with quote

qinghongh wrote:
李盈枝 wrote:
笑聊 wrote:
李盈枝 wrote:
团拜晚初时,火树银花夜。如意吉祥礼往来,热闹融残雪。
...

问前辈好!
问好!今日老朽生日,要回复许多帖子。只能偶尔过来。


李老师生日快乐!
哈哈,多谢!但要纠错,应该称——李老兄。
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 22:19:17    Post subject: Reply with quote

李老师生日快乐!!!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-07 22:35:12    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="qinghongh"][quote="笑聊"]今天是腊月二十三,民间都有过小年的习俗。谨以此词给大家拜个早年并祈祷天下太平!
...[/quote]

深感笑聊兄博爱之心:苍生安康天下太平。[/quote]
感谢庆宏兄雅评!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-09 03:06:54    Post subject: Reply with quote

为笑聊先生的大爱喝彩!好词,欣赏!
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PostPosted: 2010-02-09 04:58:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

[quote="月映春江"]为笑聊先生的大爱喝彩!好词,欣赏![/quote]
问好月映春江先生!感谢点评,雅誉!
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