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抉擇

博弈
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Posted: 2010-01-30 13:27:58 Post subject: 抉擇

抉擇飛機游過白壁鳥聲潛進屋簷月亮偶爾浮出換氣夜咖啡裏有一點浮冰我起身，想著該上廁所還是到院子去 _________________ （在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美）

hepingdao
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Posted: 2010-01-30 15:25:47 Post subject:

月亮偶爾浮出換氣 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

白水
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Posted: 2010-01-30 20:17:37 Post subject:

够晕

杯中冲浪
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Posted: 2010-01-30 20:56:02 Post subject:

我起身，想著該上廁所還是到院子去 ——院子里没厕所啊？既去院子，又上厕所。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

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Posted: 2010-01-30 21:14:48 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

月亮偶爾
浮出換氣

天上游浮雲
水面潛影時出.

Laughing

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半溪明月
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Posted: 2010-01-31 00:53:11 Post subject:

我起身，想著該上廁所還是到院子去我觉得前面都很好，后面的结尾游戏了~

博弈
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Posted: 2010-01-31 01:03:44 Post subject:

半溪明月 wrote:

我起身，想著
該上廁所還是
到院子去

我觉得前面都很好，后面的结尾游戏了~

后面其实写实，前面实物侧写。
心中的悬念，上厕所（拉掉），
到院子（散心），故题“抉择”。
好像是不太雅。哈哈。

即兴，随便看看。
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Posted: 2010-01-31 01:05:24 Post subject:

杯中冲浪 wrote:

我起身，想著
...

有时上院子浇花；
开个玩笑。
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阿依琼裙
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Posted: 2010-02-03 21:29:32 Post subject:

月亮偶爾浮出換氣替月亮松了一口气啊～～～o(∩_∩)o... _________________ 踏过废墟,走来 http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/weiyurong

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