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《高压电线上的鸟儿》

杨海军
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Posted: 2009-12-19 08:52:49 Post subject: 《高压电线上的鸟儿》

《高压电线上的鸟儿》一群鸟儿落在田野上空的两根高压电线上像一群在地头歇工的农人面对收割了一半的庄稼议论纷纷那一只大的是村长江富剩下的是一些拐弯抹角的穷亲戚他们正为点七爷收割那块地他老得变成树了他们在谈论收成说卖了粮给点七爷买副好寿材风正从坡上那片墓碑后转过来吹落了几片叶子大地空旷得让人落泪又有两只鸟飞来落到电钱上我感到沉甸甸的秋天被撞得颤了几下 _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

半溪明月
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Posted: 2009-12-19 19:36:03 Post subject:

又有两只鸟飞来落到电钱上秋天被撞得颤了几下这种悲悯的情感也把读者的人撞得颤了几下~问好!

白水
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Posted: 2009-12-19 22:48:06 Post subject:

超脱自我的着墨点，得以拓宽诗歌的视野。

林宗申
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Joined: 29 Jul 2008
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Posted: 2009-12-20 01:35:24 Post subject:

落笔画龙点睛啊。问好iu _________________ 博客：http://blog.sina.com.cn/linzongshen

杨海军
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Posted: 2009-12-20 17:08:39 Post subject:

谢谢三位诗人。祝好 _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

nobody
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Posted: 2009-12-21 04:51:50 Post subject:

N年前写过 “电线上小鸟”，所以进来看下，比我的好，顶个。 _________________ I'm nobody! Who are you?

荷梦
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Posted: 2009-12-21 05:05:29 Post subject:

有震撼力！

杨海军
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Posted: 2009-12-21 06:59:33 Post subject:

谢nobody和荷梦二位诗人。问好 _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

俞伟远
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Posted: 2009-12-21 18:53:02 Post subject:

风正从坡上那片墓碑后转过来吹落了几片叶子大地空旷得让人落泪叙述的角度和语言等都是值得我学习的。问好杨先生，新年好！ _________________ 俞伟远：１９６７生，１９８７大学毕业、工作。19９０年后几乎与诗绝缘，2006年春重拾笔，感悟生活，凝望心灵，自得其乐。http://blog.sina.com.cn/txyuweiyuan

爱月
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Posted: 2009-12-21 20:06:40 Post subject:

“大地空旷得让人落泪 ”喜欢的一句。 _________________ 诗歌、诗剧。以文会友。http://blog.sina.com.cn/juneraiyue112

吟啸徐行
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Joined: 03 May 2008
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Posted: 2009-12-21 22:42:03 Post subject:

冷静的诗句,却有催人泪下的力量. _________________ 彰显自我爱好,弘扬民族文化,追求诗意生活.

杨海军
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Posted: 2009-12-22 05:20:45 Post subject:

谢谢楼上各位诗人！！！祝大家愉快！！！！ _________________ 走了很久了。还清晰地望见/身后那盏明灭的灯火/好像我们走的越久越远/故乡的那盏灯就越亮 ——拙作《离开村庄》 http://blog.sina.com.cn/u/1269376751

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