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烟花烫
童生
Joined: 12 Mar 2007
Posts: 2
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 Posted: 2007-03-12 05:18:59 Post subject: 五律诗--寄海外华人! |
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纵然欲凌霄,
亦非万里遥;
弗恐栖别处,
他日终归巢.
小作一首献给所有海外华人朋友,我是大陆河南的!
题目暂未定,哪位朋友有兴趣可以帮忙取个题目! |
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白水
大学士
Joined: 02 Oct 2006
Posts: 14102
Location: TORONTO
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| Posted: 2007-03-12 17:26:29 Post subject: |
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欢迎新朋友. 小诗不错.
小建议, 五言律诗为五言8句, 且有对仗格律多种要求. 初学时, 不防不加这个帽子, 慢慢多写多读, 网上多交流, 会逐步提高.
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烟花烫
童生
Joined: 12 Mar 2007
Posts: 2
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| Posted: 2007-03-13 05:54:47 Post subject: |
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谢白水前辈指教!其实我这只能算是打油诗!
因为平仄没有掌握!
我只是喜欢写意境,至于格律,我讨厌墨守成规!
请别介意,小出言不逊! |
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