369913806
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 Posted: 2009-10-05 06:34:44 Post subject: 七律 归鸿 |
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归鸿岂惧阻重深，
破雾披霞傲九空。
喜戏岳云千嶂碧，
欣乘江浪一帆清。
昆仑雪域征寒气，
渤海滩头战腥风。
历尽千山缘底事?
身临万险自从容!
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冰清
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| Posted: 2009-10-05 08:01:26 Post subject: |
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归鸿岂惧阻重深，
破雾披霞傲九空。
喜戏岳云千嶂碧，
欣乘江浪一帆清。
昆仑雪域征寒气，
渤海滩头战腥风。
历尽千山缘底事?
身临万险自从容!
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气势非凡。读来似有“目送飞鸿，影入长天灭”(龚自珍《点绛唇》词)之慨。
但若冠之以律，则又必须遵循它的押韵的规范。 |
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米运刚
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| Posted: 2009-10-05 16:14:35 Post subject: |
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| 同感。问好！ |
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369913806
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| Posted: 2009-10-06 01:54:50 Post subject: |
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谢二位指教
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| Posted: 2009-10-07 16:53:53 Post subject: |
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身临万险自从容!
----好句！
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