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【水调歌头】 萧杀 【定格】
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PostPosted: 2009-05-22 13:43:33    Post subject: 【水调歌头】 萧杀 【定格】 Reply with quote

【水调歌头】 萧杀 【定格】


傍晚雨初霁, 斜日黯千山。
流光石火掀动, 暗水起微澜。
蝉老嘶声凄厉, 蛩怯哀鸣断续, 鱼鸟已知寒。
寂寞闲鸦懒, 归雁隐南天。

恁清冷, 萧杀里,不堪言。
艰辛危难, 狂飙一叶小舟扁。*
算有中流砥拄,但得回春妙手,神力挽强澜。
遥想亲朋处, 今夜可平安?



* 扁, 音偏。

水调歌头,词牌名。亦称《花犯念奴》。
双调六十字。前后阕各四平韵,一韵到底。前后句起二字也可用对仗。
此调是截取《水调歌》大曲开头一章的创新之作。





【定格】
中仄仄平仄,中仄仄平平(韵)。
中平中仄平中,中仄仄平平(韵)。
中仄平平中仄,中仄平平中仄,中仄仄平平(韵)。
中仄仄平仄,中仄仄平平(韵)。

中中中,中中仄,仄平平(韵)。
中平中仄,平中平仄仄平平(韵)。
『中仄平平中仄,中仄平平中仄』,中仄仄平平(韵)。
中仄中平仄,中仄仄平平(韵)。
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PostPosted: 2009-05-22 16:22:40    Post subject: Reply with quote

雅词正格,惜新意不足.
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PostPosted: 2009-06-07 19:19:05    Post subject: Reply with quote

野航雅赏!
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