渔樵耕读
秀才
Joined: 12 Mar 2007
Posts: 116
Location: 中国湖南长沙
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 Posted: 2007-03-12 06:50:35 Post subject: 七律 忆友 |
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每临风月忆故交，昔时点滴着狼毫。
笔笔豪情山林啸，行行知己夜灯聊。
筵前纵论千年事，月下高谈万古尧。
一别经年人健否？梦魂牵绕到今朝。
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自然风
童生
Joined: 20 Feb 2009
Posts: 53
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| Posted: 2009-04-21 00:13:13 Post subject: |
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| 渔樵耕读 wrote: |
每临风月忆故交，昔时点滴着狼毫。
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故字如为仄声字，则出律。不知对否？ |
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黄洋界
探花
Joined: 23 Mar 2007
Posts: 3301
Location: 多伦多,加拿大
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| Posted: 2009-04-21 16:04:52 Post subject: |
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"一别经年人健否?梦魂牵绕到今朝".
忆念故友,感情深切.
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qinghongh
榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007
Posts: 4110
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| Posted: 2009-04-21 16:07:37 Post subject: |
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忆友情深。
“梦魂牵绕到今朝。 ”改为“梦牵魂绕到今朝。 ”如何？仅供诗友参考。 |
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晓松
举人
Joined: 26 Feb 2007
Posts: 1192
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| Posted: 2009-05-05 16:49:04 Post subject: |
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| 渔樵耕读朋友好久没来古韵板块了，今见之，倍感亲切。问好！ |
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