白云闲人 探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007 Posts: 3466
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Posted: 2009-04-07 16:23:19 Post subject: <春思> |
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踏雪更知朔气癫,
披风倍念故园川.
南望蛱蝶穿花舞,
又见蜻蜓点水翩. _________________ 诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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白水 大学士

Joined: 02 Oct 2006 Posts: 14102 Location: TORONTO 白水Collection |
Posted: 2009-04-07 16:35:11 Post subject: |
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临屏草和,见笑了
又见蜻蜓点水翩
北疆异国思故园
清明窗外风吹雪
四月梨花祭九天 |
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白云闲人 探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007 Posts: 3466
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Posted: 2009-04-07 16:42:29 Post subject: |
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谢白水!白水思聪敏捷! "四月梨花祭九天"佳句也! _________________ 诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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qinghongh 榜眼
Joined: 14 Oct 2007 Posts: 4110
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Posted: 2009-04-07 17:35:38 Post subject: |
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四月梨花祭九天,
桃红柳绿燕飞还。
春风若解思乡意,
吹动白云作远帆。 |
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lulu 秀才

Joined: 25 Jan 2009 Posts: 264 Location: dream home luluCollection |
Posted: 2009-04-08 01:47:44 Post subject: |
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lulu给各位老师问好,并向各位老师学习,接上一首,请指教!
吹动白云作远帆,
烟波浩淼水涟涟。
彩蝶飞舞春花美,
伊在南疆望故园。 _________________ 荣辱不惊, 闲看亭前花开花落; 去留无意, 漫随天外云卷云舒 |
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白云闲人 探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007 Posts: 3466
白云闲人Collection |
Posted: 2009-04-08 05:03:27 Post subject: |
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谢庆宏君! "吹动白云作远帆"形象! _________________ 诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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白云闲人 探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007 Posts: 3466
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Posted: 2009-04-08 05:08:00 Post subject: |
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谢lulu! "烟波浩淼水涟涟"好句!
和你切磋一下:"彩蝶"改为"蝶蜂"是否会更好!(因"蝶"字为仄声) _________________ 诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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lulu 秀才

Joined: 25 Jan 2009 Posts: 264 Location: dream home luluCollection |
Posted: 2009-04-20 01:53:36 Post subject: |
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白云闲人 wrote: |
谢lulu! "烟波浩淼水涟涟"好句!
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谢白云老师雅评!问好!请多赐教!
感觉您是从远古走来,从唐诗宋词中走来,您古韵的功底真是相当的扎实啊,羡慕!
没办法,lulu呢,就只能用新韵了。。。
赞同您的意见,把“彩蝶”改为“蝶蜂”,但在新韵当中,“蝶”是平声韵哦!
吹动白云作远帆,
烟波浩淼水涟涟。
蝶蜂飞舞春花美,
伊在南疆望故园。 _________________ 荣辱不惊, 闲看亭前花开花落; 去留无意, 漫随天外云卷云舒 |
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白云闲人 探花
Joined: 26 Aug 2007 Posts: 3466
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Posted: 2009-04-20 05:07:19 Post subject: |
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lulu对不起!我经常误会你使用古韵呢,请莫介意. _________________ 诗中岁月,
笛里关山. |
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