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浣溪沙新写 (收藏)

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Posted: 2009-04-17 05:39:35 Post subject: 浣溪沙新写 (收藏)

《浣溪沙》晏殊一曲新词酒一杯，去年天气旧池台，夕阳西下几时回？无可奈何花落去，似曾相识燕归来，小园香径独徘徊。一曲新词酒一杯春日迟迟一手握笔，一手持杯坐在去年的亭台酒与诗一进一出，一出一进不知谁先会底朝天 by 微笑去年天气旧池台生绿锈的铜铃，还是很好听鱼儿在莲池中亲着一朵朵白云亭檐下，去年的笑容在一只古老黝黑陶罐上露出洁白牙，六根清静 by 微笑夕阳西下几时回夕阳醉至深处一半落海，一半倚天又是一次崖岸铺纸着墨的送别待我写尽一夜香墨你会不会又盈盈冉冉冉冉盈盈的向我走来？ by 红袖无可奈何花落去小桥流水奈何落花，奈何落泪凭栏粉色的午后浅情与寂寞叠叠错错，错错叠叠回不去最初的那一凝眸 by 悠子似曾相识燕归来一只兴冲冲的归燕勤快地衔着春天的泥巴在一首唐诗里筑窝和它点了点头穿过懒散的雨巷我去吃一碗扬州炒饭 by 微笑小园香径独徘徊落英纷纷一手扶风，一手抚香杳杳魂游桃花径侬和花相拥相扶，相扶相拥不知谁更不胜轻风 by 红袖

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Posted: 2009-04-17 06:16:44 Post subject: 好玩。建议继续，还有建议

段落与段落之间要有逗笑，问答，对话 _________________ 梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

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Posted: 2009-04-17 10:36:53 Post subject:

逗笑, 你来逗，拈花来笑

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Posted: 2009-04-20 02:12:12 Post subject:

好呀，好呀！ _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2009-04-20 02:14:42 Post subject: 在脸上画个手表，在手上画个眼镜之类的。

红袖添乱 wrote:

段落与段落之间要有逗笑，问答，对话

_________________
可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2009-04-20 02:17:46 Post subject: 我要勇于赞成。

悠子 wrote:

逗笑, 你来逗，拈花来笑

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可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2009-04-21 07:43:16 Post subject: 要勇于不赞成~哈哈~~

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

悠子 wrote:

逗笑, 你来逗，拈花来笑

_________________
梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

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Posted: 2009-04-21 07:51:18 Post subject: 可是不赞成我们玩得会更凶点儿

红袖添乱 wrote:

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

悠子 wrote:

逗笑, 你来逗，拈花来笑

_________________
梦的一端是我脉脉的凝视，
而另一端是你清澈的眼睛。

詩盜喜裸評
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Posted: 2009-04-21 20:17:02 Post subject: 恩，一人搞定一首！

红袖添乱 wrote:

诗盗喜裸评 wrote:

悠子 wrote:

逗笑, 你来逗，拈花来笑

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可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2009-04-21 20:18:44 Post subject: 补充，同一首。

登登 _________________ 可情可理，去捧就真

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Posted: 2009-04-22 08:16:35 Post subject: 登登啥

詩盜喜裸評 wrote:

登登

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Posted: 2009-04-23 05:56:50 Post subject: 亮相打招呼！

悠子 wrote:

诗盗喜裸评 wrote:

登登

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