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新来的，写诗歌《唉，清明》

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Posted: 2009-02-21 23:16:58 Post subject: 新来的，写诗歌《唉，清明》

2月13，我的又一个清明祭奠的却是和四月初不一样的事情记得去年这天你说出分手如同钉子，楔进风的疼我感觉自己突然坠落到春天下面尽管当时是愣在原地没动直到现在，那么多的日子在石磨上被碾碎，倒入下水道或者是抽水马桶可我依然是爱情的后置宾语怎么也提不到生活前面依然不敢停下来，哪怕一分钟的安静也会60秒想起你，想起那天我像一截受伤的铁曝晒在黑暗中至于太阳，则是我砸到天空里的一滴眼泪至今，烧得很红

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Posted: 2009-02-22 08:28:22 Post subject:

这比喻倒独特～问好～多写～ _________________ 如果不开始，会失去过程。 QQ：3972083 微信：qisebaihuayuan

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Posted: 2009-02-24 02:27:36 Post subject:

安红红 wrote:

这比喻倒独特～

问好～多写～

恩。谢谢斑竹照顾哈。
怎么一进来感觉冷静的很啊。
而且稍微热乎点的地方就是熟人扎堆。这样对我们这样的新来的，是不是？呵呵

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Posted: 2009-02-24 02:32:03 Post subject:

后现代刀子 wrote:

安红红 wrote:

这比喻倒独特～

问好～多写～

恩。谢谢斑竹照顾哈。
...

刀子同学~我想不是这样的~来的都是朋友~端的茶送的水都是一个壶里倒出来的~

多写~希望经常看到你的诗歌~

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Posted: 2009-02-25 14:16:49 Post subject: 欢迎

欢迎新朋友！顶！ _________________ 靠才华为自己带来幸福的是才子;靠才华为自己带来痛苦的是诗人!!http://blog.sina.com.cn/hanshaojun345

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Posted: 2009-02-25 15:49:17 Post subject:

至于太阳，则是我砸到天空里的一滴眼泪很有空间的诗句, 不错.多与大家交流, 相信会有更多的朋友.

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Posted: 2009-02-25 21:06:53 Post subject:

安红红 wrote:

后现代刀子 wrote:

安红红 wrote:

这比喻倒独特～

问好～多写～

恩。谢谢斑竹照顾哈。
...

刀子同学~我想不是这样的~来的都是朋友~端的茶送的水都是一个壶里倒出来的~
...

好嘞。只要有斑竹这句话，我就放心大胆的进来住下了哈

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Posted: 2009-02-25 21:07:24 Post subject:

我特希望与大家多交流

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Posted: 2009-02-25 21:09:30 Post subject:

韩少君 wrote:

欢迎新朋友！顶！

谢谢斑竹过来顶一下。多交流哈

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Posted: 2009-02-25 21:10:31 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

至于太阳，则是我
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我也比较喜欢这个句子。所以放在最后面。嘿嘿这是我的小私心。嘿嘿

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Posted: 2009-02-26 12:16:36 Post subject:

后现代刀子 wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

至于太阳，则是我
...

我也比较喜欢这个句子。所以放在最后面。嘿嘿这是我的小私心。嘿嘿

哈，小私心。一定是个聪明的小女孩 Very Happy

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Posted: 2009-02-28 15:00:12 Post subject:

很好的语言。欢迎新朋友。 _________________ 杯中冲浪.披履而行 http://blog.sina.com.cn/shoutao006

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Posted: 2009-03-10 03:28:27 Post subject:

结尾真的很好,有张力~~~ 再一次欢迎凯凯~~~ _________________ 踏过废墟,走来 http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/weiyurong

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