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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:00:27    Post subject: Reply with quote
吟啸徐行 wrote:
有汤圆引出如此的联想和诗意,比吃汤圆远让愉悦.


谢谢鼓励. 问好.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:02:35    Post subject: Reply with quote
晴宝儿 wrote:
冤家, 远远地
让我们就这样对视

想象丰富，精致小诗！


问好宝儿,欣赏你的诗歌.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:03:24    Post subject: Reply with quote
半溪明月 wrote:
感觉将最后一段去掉比较好。因为前一段已与起始形成回环反复~个见！
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月亮, 问好佳节 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:05:07    Post subject: Reply with quote
冰清 wrote:
白水
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冰清, 哪天我给一定给你煮最好吃的汤圆. Razz
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:06:44    Post subject: Reply with quote
孙国福 wrote:
语言优美，意境深远！


你和诗友们的回帖给了我更多的写作动力. 谢谢 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:12:21    Post subject: Reply with quote
晴宝儿 wrote:
我记得我回复来着，怎没痕迹了，刚读明月的也觉得是，再走到这里，越发确定是读过的
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宝儿, 可能是电脑显示有点问题? 我这里能看见.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:13:38    Post subject: Reply with quote
阿依琼裙 wrote:
语言非常优美和动情~~

喜欢!


谢谢你, 久不见你了, 真有点想 Very Happy
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:16:36    Post subject: Reply with quote
娇娇 wrote:
永恒的，就是这痛。
“这”又是什么，我常常不知道。


娇娇, 谢谢理解. 我们有着相似的感觉.这首诗歌是写给缪斯的, 言不能尽......
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:17:29    Post subject: Reply with quote
爱月 wrote:
“默默地让我们对视, 冤家 ”喜欢这样的句子；在痛中生的感觉。


问好爱月, 喜欢读你的诗歌.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:18:25    Post subject: Reply with quote
杨海军 wrote:
我不想开灯, 任
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谢谢海军, 你点到诗眼了.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 15:19:51    Post subject: Reply with quote
孙国福 wrote:
细品，回味悠长！！！


问好国福, 谢谢鼓励.
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PostPosted: 2009-02-14 17:13:42    Post subject: Reply with quote
冤家啊冤家
这个词用的忒好了
给整首诗添了不少色
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PostPosted: 2009-02-15 03:41:13    Post subject: Reply with quote
白水 Moonlight wrote:
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默默地让我们对视, 冤家
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带有一定民俗色彩,语言运用得恰到好处.问好白水诗人!
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PostPosted: 2009-02-15 04:51:01    Post subject: Reply with quote
刘浪 wrote:
冤家啊冤家
这个词用的忒好了
给整首诗添了不少色


不是冤家给诗歌添色, 而是诗歌本身就是我的冤家 Wink
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PostPosted: 2009-02-15 04:51:34    Post subject: Reply with quote
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白水 Moonlight wrote:
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默默地让我们对视, 冤家
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带有一定民俗色彩,语言运用得恰到好处.问好白水诗人!


问好朋友.
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