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摸鱼儿《寄思同仁堂》

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白水
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Posted: 2009-02-07 07:19:04 Post subject: 摸鱼儿《寄思同仁堂》

摸鱼儿《寄思同仁堂》夜凭栏, 柳涵清月, 浅勾陈疾疏缕。且将文火煎汤水, 桔梗紫苏白术。悄寄语, 问伊妹, 可知沙罐青青雾? 妖娆鬼舞。任曲赋歌狂, 碎诗飘雪, 天地尽飞素。风凝笔, 淡扫十年羁旅。梨花新裹玉树。粉蝶托梦八千里，忘了曾别南浦。愁几许？弄孤影？扑哧俏笑忧烦去。懒温旧事。恹恹病轻拂，借杯薄酒，醇酿醉鸥鷺。

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Posted: 2009-02-07 08:44:05 Post subject:

白水,"摸鱼儿"赋得妙! 真是: 任曲赋歌狂! 祝: 身壮力健,精神爽利! _________________ 诗中岁月, 笛里关山.

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-07 08:50:25 Post subject:

谢谢白云. 这几天病的晕忽忽的, 不想干正事, 填填词权当休息了

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Posted: 2009-02-07 08:51:38 Post subject:

药罐妙词，疑是黛玉返人间？

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-07 13:44:20 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

药罐妙词，疑是黛玉返人间？

哈, QINGHONGH. 不是那么病秧子吧?

恹恹病轻拂，借杯薄酒，醇酿醉鸥鷺

没看还在这轻拂恹恹病AND醉那白片片的诗歌呢? 哈哈一乐是消病良方 Wink

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Posted: 2009-02-07 16:13:45 Post subject:

善哉。

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Posted: 2009-02-07 17:48:25 Post subject:

借杯薄酒,轻拂微恙,白水本来就是乐观之人! "扑哧一笑忧烦去".用词雅俗共陈,且是一剂良方! "忘了曾别南浦",说是忘而不能竟忘......... 待我细细欣赏! ' _________________ ++++++++++++++ 喜金石书画，友竹菊梅兰

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-08 05:21:30 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

善哉。

善缘

特高兴终于把那大病毒给打跑了 Very Happy

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-08 05:28:59 Post subject:

黄洋界 wrote:

借杯薄酒,轻拂微恙,白水本来就是乐观之人!
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谢谢黄老师. 填词有时会把人引领到一种伤感的心态, 写完后突然觉得有点小病呻吟, 不由得乐了. 索性改了改. 这一改, 还真乐了 Very Happy

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Posted: 2009-02-08 06:09:42 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

qinghongh wrote:

善哉。

善缘

...

恭喜！又精神抖擞。

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Posted: 2009-02-08 06:37:16 Post subject:

白水好词。扑哧俏笑，懒温旧事，醉同鸥鷺。良药一剂病去也。问好！

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Posted: 2009-02-08 13:34:45 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

摸鱼儿《寄思同仁堂》

夜凭栏, 柳涵清月, 浅勾陈疾疏缕。
...

问好白水老师！“摸鱼儿”一定是古诗的一种格律吧？仔细研究了一下您这首诗的结构和写法，尝试着学一学，请多指教！
不好意思，在此借用了几位网友的大名，如有不妥，还望见谅！

问斜阳，清风缭绕，晓松秋叶如故？
晓松静赏蓝田玉，秋叶海中忙碌。
白水语
庆宏弟，可知南浦云遮雾？
梦中古渡
野航觅田园，过和平岛，泉水月明路。

抬头望，枫叶枫林果树。
连南河畔留步。
闻山南北游鱼府，圣火流金无数。
观远处
清明月，看风雪夜归人舞。
风中飞舞
扫片片飞花，小城故事，他日再倾诉。
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Posted: 2009-02-08 15:02:25 Post subject:

且将文火煎汤水, 桔梗紫苏白术。这句蛮有味道. _________________ 回归自然回归心灵回归传统

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Posted: 2009-02-08 19:32:27 Post subject:

妹妹们都会摸鱼儿还摸得这么好,羡慕呀兄弟们想摸又不敢摸 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫!

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-09 14:19:32 Post subject:

qinghongh wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

qinghongh wrote:

善哉。

善缘

...

恭喜！又精神抖擞。

谢谢

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-09 14:20:32 Post subject:

冰清 wrote:

白水好词。

扑哧俏笑，懒温旧事，醉同鸥鷺。
良药一剂病去也。问好！

谢谢冰清, 问好元宵节 Very Happy

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-09 14:28:25 Post subject:

lulu wrote:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

摸鱼儿《寄思同仁堂》

夜凭栏, 柳涵清月, 浅勾陈疾疏缕。
...

问好白水老师！“摸鱼儿”一定是古诗的一种格律吧？仔细研究了一下您这首诗的结构和写法，尝试着学一学，请多指教！
...

谢谢LULU和诗, 收藏了.
摸鱼儿是个词牌, 有词谱.
别再叫我老师了, 中国诗词如渊如海, 学无尽头, 我这水平哪里敢沾"师"字 Embarassed

QINGHONGH可能对你说过, 这个网站有许多资源可以参考, 如有兴趣不防去看看. 愿你喜欢. Very Happy

http://oson.ca/cpoetry/index.php

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-09 14:31:49 Post subject:

野航 wrote:

且将文火煎汤水, 桔梗紫苏白术。

这句蛮有味道.

药味?

白水
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Posted: 2009-02-09 14:36:36 Post subject:

hepingdao wrote:

妹妹们都会摸鱼儿
还摸得这么好,羡慕呀

兄弟们想摸又不敢摸
Laughing

导弹

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Posted: 2009-02-09 23:23:08 Post subject:

白水 Moonlight wrote:

hepingdao wrote:

妹妹们都会摸鱼儿
还摸得这么好,羡慕呀

兄弟们想摸又不敢摸
Laughing

导弹

您的表情太可怕了！

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