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 Posted: 2009-01-25 23:56:38 Post subject: 七绝 秋思（和庆宏老师七绝 秋思） |
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给各位诗友问好，请指教！
七绝 秋思
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暮色苍茫海近天，清风逐浪水涟涟。
梅沙远望波涛涌，君在他乡梦可甜？
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暗香如沁
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| Posted: 2009-01-26 19:26:05 Post subject: |
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把你的诗一路看下来,很是受益.流畅自如。白话入诗,却也是情真如此。很好。
但很多时候，随性可以,却不可随手,如果把字句再炼炼会更精彩.
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lulu
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| Posted: 2009-01-27 08:46:12 Post subject: |
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把你的诗一路看下来,很是受益.流畅自如。白话入诗,却也是情真如此。很好。
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非常感谢您的赏阅雅评！谢谢您的指教！希望向您多多学习！还望借您的慧眼雅正！
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