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 发表于: 2007-08-31 12:52:16 发表主题: 俗俳/谐俳（得博弈鼓励，加一特刊） |
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Always get short-changed
but always get over-charged
Math makes me confused
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On all the bank notes
who cares who’s who? But beware
of bogus money
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Baked in Hell’s oven
kids scared hearing this story
vowed to be true men
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Of course, for the oil
the earth is drilled, the sea sucked
What else is intact?
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Singularity -
Freedom from duplicity
He remains single
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“Who’s indecisive?”
A decision maker grinned
“I’ll decide for you!”
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Flies buzz around a
cow’s arse like bees to honey
a different taste
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I’m a pragmatist
A house, a car, stocks n’ savings -
A must for the wed!
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Family planning -
Just one child per family
Boys outnumbered girls
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With a pinch of salt
the soup tastes most delicious
Mama’s masterpiece
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| 发表于: 2007-08-31 20:46:45 发表主题: Re: 俗俳/谐俳（得博弈鼓励，加一特刊） |
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（得到博弈鼓励，加一特刊，10 首 俗俳/谐俳）
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Always get short-changed
but always get over-charged
Math makes me confused
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wow, thanks, finally something falls into my comfort zone,
I like the name 谐俳, should be easily difficult or difficultly easy?
I can read one at a time, for I know, be extremely careful with petite size
for fun, how about the 3rd line as:
O Math ‘n mad tricks
sound close to "O Mathematics"
but -ed pattern will be lost, well, just a first read 
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Lake
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O Math ‘n mad tricks
sound close to "O Mathematics" |
it's cute.
you are crafted with the sound of words, that's for sure.
it's open to various options, no need to worry about the end sound.
I need help in the third line all the time. Thanks.
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Flies buzz around a
cow’s arse like bees to honey
a different taste
Always get short-changed
but always get over-charged
Math makes me confused
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Flies buzz around a
cow’s arse like bees to honey
a different taste
Always get short-changed
but always get over-charged
Math makes me confused
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Is this comment or replacement, or tongue-in-cheek.... ?
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Flies buzz around a
cow’s arse like bees to honey
a different taste
how about speech instead of taste?
ps.
This poem reminds me 911 and US, UK,
quite different from your original intent, maybe
Why I said that?
Buzz is like a US word like Bush, arse is like a Brit slang, like its PM;
there is no honey but attacks by bees and sweet talks to the
stinky.
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谢谢博弈 给这首小诗 赋予多义。
读读你的解析，也是这么回事，说得通。
Kokho 是不是觉得 'arse' sounds vulgar?
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