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[Lake]

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苛刻的剑锋
潇洒游刃五形中
挟异域风情

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博东复弈西
古今中外数符奇
读懂不容易

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平平仄仄平
何需翻山涉溪觅
戴珏舞秘籍

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The south palm trees ripe with coco
Under a bodhi tree sits Kokho
He calms people with Zen
Shooting montage with his pen
Five style poems, what a rococo

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Marksman means Mark is a skillful man
Shooting at target not others can
His reasoning mingles
With romance that tingles
Many a verse fun for us to scan

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Edgar runs a business report
A rhyme watcher, no meter comes short
He spots, “under the sun”
Differs from “in the sun”
It disturbs him if a form distorts
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[戴玨]

英文版好多了！
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[kino]

The south palm trees ripe with coco
Under a bodhi tree sits Kokho
He calms people with Zen
Shooting montage with his pen
Five style poems, what a rococo

witty~

[博弈]

very good attempt in giving a Chinese way of 5,7,5 poem,
and also the new designed 5-line rhyme scheme in the English version.
This is poetry in forms according to my '0 expansion' theory, then
these forms hold essence wrt. wits. I like these.

ps. Sorry no Chinese input here.
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[Lake]

谢谢戴玨和Kino 到访留言。

周末，本来想顺口溜一下的，结果溜不顺。
罢了，罢了。没入门。
只要三位不介意。
别人我绝不敢乱点。
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[Lake]

Thanks for the comment, Mark.

Yes, the form and the rhyme scheme and the tone. You got it.

What is your '0 expansion' theory?
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[Lake]

Thanks 戴玨 for the encouraging words.

Here is the revised verse 3:

Edgar, the king of rhyme and meter
A form in mind used as a ruler
He spots “under the sun”
Differs from “in the sun”
An eyesore when he sees a “cheater”
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[William Zhou周道模]

i've read these chinese poems and english poems.thank you for your work
and your discussions.
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
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[Lake]

Thanks William. Really for fun - fun with different characters and a bit laugh that's what life is for, isn't it?
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the trouble with poetry is that it encourages the writing of more poetry -- Billy Collins

[kokho]

厉害 你让我惭愧了 ：））

这样的游戏人间。。。 你的诗歌就出来了

《》淌开心怀来玩吧 ！！！


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[William Zhou周道模]

诸位：
生活本来应该fun
为何人人顶个sun
世界处处可play
抛了忧伤抱个gay
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诗歌是灵魂的歌唱.
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[Lake]