许蔚 童生
Joined: 07 Jan 2007 Posts: 68
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Posted: 2007-04-28 20:04:22 Post subject: 海上闲笔三:巽风 |
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海上闲笔三:巽风
许蔚
巽风不时来
漫卷千里故道
无处寂寞
无处惹尘埃
07.4.26
14:02时客海上白云观 |
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hepingdao Site Admin

Joined: 25 May 2006 Posts: 8106
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Posted: 2007-04-28 20:19:39 Post subject: |
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凝炼 _________________ 为网友服务: 端茶倒水勤打扫! |
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杯中冲浪 进士出身
Joined: 29 Sep 2006 Posts: 2891 Location: 中国 杯中冲浪Collection |
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阿依琼裙 秀才

Joined: 09 Apr 2007 Posts: 920 Location: 废墟之上 阿依琼裙Collection |
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金金 进士出身

Joined: 08 Feb 2007 Posts: 2035 Location: 山东济宁 金金Collection |
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许蔚 童生
Joined: 07 Jan 2007 Posts: 68
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Posted: 2007-05-01 06:43:01 Post subject: |
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呵呵,风总是要来的,就看是什么风了
另,曾经有人说我的文字太个人,所以不容易明白,不过我觉得诗这种东西就应该个人,一个人的东西读得多了,自然就会了解他想什么,写什么,呵呵
不过这两年比较懒,写得东西不多,大家见到的就少了,以后不时地翻些旧作出来给大家看看吧 |
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博弈 榜眼
Joined: 21 Dec 2006 Posts: 4381 Location: SFO 博弈Collection |
Posted: 2007-05-02 10:05:04 Post subject: |
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此诗在巽,“无处寂寞“改“寂寞无处“何如? _________________ (在不斷的審醜裡終將建立起新的審美) |
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许蔚 童生
Joined: 07 Jan 2007 Posts: 68
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Posted: 2007-05-03 03:20:49 Post subject: |
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| 是,倒是可以,不过下句如何改 |
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